I had to list and describe 3 unique factors that have shaped who I am. 100 words or less.I want to know if mine are good and if you have any grammar suggestions.
Here is what I wrote:
My health obstacle.
While I finally found out what had been causing my constant absences in school, I learned about the meaning of strength. I learned how much pain I could endure and that I could deal with no food for a day or having many tests done. However, I didn't learn its meaning from only my endurance, but from the children I came across in the hospital. Seeing a child ride on an I.V. pole smiling, despite his sickness taught me what strength really is. Strength means, in spite of all the suffering, you can smile knowing you'll be fine.
My multi-racial background.
My background may be confusing, but it's colorful and makes me who I am. Each culture or ethnicity contributes to what makes me who I am. Being Puerto Rican adds to my loud and untamed spirit, while my American roots give me the structure and drive I need to succeed. Even my smaller racial influences are a part of me. Being Cherokee Indian gives me patience and level headiness. French brings me more elegance. They all give me so much in different ways. My multi-racial background makes me unique and reminds me I was born to be different.
My mother's economic struggle
My mother worked hard all her life to give my brother and me a better life. However, she always told us to never be ashamed of whom we are. Her work hard attitude helped me to always be grateful for what is given to me and not to take things for granted. Not only that, but it taught me that success is not obtained through watching television, but getting up and working for it. My life may not have been filled with expensive things, but I it was filled with life lessons that are more important.
Here is what I wrote:
My health obstacle.
While I finally found out what had been causing my constant absences in school, I learned about the meaning of strength. I learned how much pain I could endure and that I could deal with no food for a day or having many tests done. However, I didn't learn its meaning from only my endurance, but from the children I came across in the hospital. Seeing a child ride on an I.V. pole smiling, despite his sickness taught me what strength really is. Strength means, in spite of all the suffering, you can smile knowing you'll be fine.
My multi-racial background.
My background may be confusing, but it's colorful and makes me who I am. Each culture or ethnicity contributes to what makes me who I am. Being Puerto Rican adds to my loud and untamed spirit, while my American roots give me the structure and drive I need to succeed. Even my smaller racial influences are a part of me. Being Cherokee Indian gives me patience and level headiness. French brings me more elegance. They all give me so much in different ways. My multi-racial background makes me unique and reminds me I was born to be different.
My mother's economic struggle
My mother worked hard all her life to give my brother and me a better life. However, she always told us to never be ashamed of whom we are. Her work hard attitude helped me to always be grateful for what is given to me and not to take things for granted. Not only that, but it taught me that success is not obtained through watching television, but getting up and working for it. My life may not have been filled with expensive things, but I it was filled with life lessons that are more important.
