I am supposed to write a scholarship letter for my school's local scholarships. Other than a sheet with my personal info, lists of activites, and transcript, this is the only other thing that i will be sending them, so it is very important. The requirements for the scholarships are being in the top half of class and active in school and community. Here is what I have for the body. My intro paragraph is horrible so lots of help there especially would really be appreciated. I am waiting to see if i am accepted to my last 2 colleges before deciding, and that paragraph needs more but i rather hate intro's. Other than that, did I miss anything or get too detailed on something? Thank you very much for your help and sugestions!
"My name is ___. I am currently a senior at ____ High School. After graduating I will be attending a four-year university.
Throughout high school, I advocated for the hardest classes possible. In math, foreign language, and many electives, I was one to two years ahead of my grade level. As a junior I took AP Calculus AB and BC, completed my school's math program and received AP scores of 4 and 3. As a senior, the only math class available was physics, which was ridiculously easy for me. I convinced the administrators to let me take a college-level, calculus-based physics class through Brigham Young University. I completed four years of Spanish before my senior year. I opted for the most advanced class whenever possible, such as Advanced English 9 and 10, and AP Government. I am taking my third Project Lead the Way (PLTW) class through Milwaukee School of Engineering. I never settle for coasting through easy classes; I try to find classes that are as challenging as possible.
I give back to my school by helping others. For 4 years I have been a teaching assistant for 5-8th grade math teams, chess club, PLTW summer school, and the current AP Calculus class. I have been a 4-H officer and youth leader for 6 years. Through 4-H, Student Council, FCCLA, class government, and National Honor Society I have been active in many school and community projects. I started recycling projects, organized pep rallies, renovated a park, and developed a school-wide Veteran's Day program. I am also an avid reader and enjoy horseback riding.
I plan to graduate with a Bachelor's in engineering, then go on to graduate school for a Master's degree in a more specific engineering program, such as biomedical or robotics engineering. This scholarship would substantially reduce my need to work during the school year, allowing me to focus on my classes and maintain my high standards and performance. Thank you for taking the time and effort to review my application. "
"My name is ___. I am currently a senior at ____ High School. After graduating I will be attending a four-year university.
Throughout high school, I advocated for the hardest classes possible. In math, foreign language, and many electives, I was one to two years ahead of my grade level. As a junior I took AP Calculus AB and BC, completed my school's math program and received AP scores of 4 and 3. As a senior, the only math class available was physics, which was ridiculously easy for me. I convinced the administrators to let me take a college-level, calculus-based physics class through Brigham Young University. I completed four years of Spanish before my senior year. I opted for the most advanced class whenever possible, such as Advanced English 9 and 10, and AP Government. I am taking my third Project Lead the Way (PLTW) class through Milwaukee School of Engineering. I never settle for coasting through easy classes; I try to find classes that are as challenging as possible.
I give back to my school by helping others. For 4 years I have been a teaching assistant for 5-8th grade math teams, chess club, PLTW summer school, and the current AP Calculus class. I have been a 4-H officer and youth leader for 6 years. Through 4-H, Student Council, FCCLA, class government, and National Honor Society I have been active in many school and community projects. I started recycling projects, organized pep rallies, renovated a park, and developed a school-wide Veteran's Day program. I am also an avid reader and enjoy horseback riding.
I plan to graduate with a Bachelor's in engineering, then go on to graduate school for a Master's degree in a more specific engineering program, such as biomedical or robotics engineering. This scholarship would substantially reduce my need to work during the school year, allowing me to focus on my classes and maintain my high standards and performance. Thank you for taking the time and effort to review my application. "
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