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Question
Commonwealth Scholarships in the United Kingdom receive funding from the UK Department for International Development. An important selection criterion is therefore the potential contribution that you will make to development if you receive a Commonwealth Shared Scholarship. You must provide a statement (limit of 500 words) explaining how your proposed study relates to a development need.
You are advised in your statement to describe how your plan of study relates to development in your sector and country. Please say how, on your return, you will apply your new skills and qualifications, and what outcomes you will hope to achieve. This could usefully be related to a national development priority or objective. Please also suggest how the impact of the potential benefits of your work might be measured.
My Answer
Since Nigeria's independence in October 1960, mass literacy had been on the front burner of the country's educational policy. Right from 1970's, there had been proliferation of policies to reposition educational system within the country. As a result of recognition of the importance of an educated nation, privatization and commercialization efforts had been a running war to reposition public education through various measures in order to provide qualitative education, accommodate increased interest; as well as compete with other nation's academic system.
In spite of undying zest for improvement of public educational system at all levels in the country, less had been achieved over the years. Service delivery just like most public sectors within the country had been very inadequate. Minimum results are being achieved compared to huge efforts. However this failure cannot be isolated from inadequate managerial and professional manpower in the sector. No doubt, for policy enacted to come to fruition, the administrative structures created for its implementation must be handled by adequate professionals. This connote that for Nigerian government to accomplish its goals aimed at national development through education, public administrative structures which focuses in the implementation of public sectors policies; must receive utmost attention.
My quest to engage in the race of moving Nigerian public sectors forward, especially the educational sector which determines the 'products' of the society led to my study of Public Administration at undergraduate level. The knowledge I had gained in comparative administration and my desire to advance my career in the field, is the reason for my decision to continue at a postgraduate level which will create an avenue for me to build upon my analytical and problem solving skills which the study offers.
Without doubt, I believe if I am considered for this scholarship, the skills to be taught in Queen Mary University of London and the postgraduate degree I will obtain, on my return after my studies I will join the Public institution as a university lecturer which will provide an avenue for me to participate in teaching, research and helping the government to develop and implement its policies geared towards citizens welfare.
The skills I will acquire through the scholarship will help me achieve my career and professional goals, towards repositioning Nigerian public education system for prompt and efficient service delivery that will enhance social economic development.
Finally, with the knowledge I will gather, I hope to contribute to national development by creating an awareness programme to enlighten and eradicate phobia held by most parents especially in the Northern part of Nigeria about Western education, and the need to avail their children opportunities provided by the government. This in effect will reduce the rate of illiteracy and encourage mass education including Girl Child education which the country aspires for.
Question
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Commonwealth Scholarships in the United Kingdom receive funding from the UK Department for International Development. An important selection criterion is therefore the potential contribution that you will make to development if you receive a Commonwealth Shared Scholarship. You must provide a statement (limit of 500 words) explaining how your proposed study relates to a development need.
You are advised in your statement to describe how your plan of study relates to development in your sector and country. Please say how, on your return, you will apply your new skills and qualifications, and what outcomes you will hope to achieve. This could usefully be related to a national development priority or objective. Please also suggest how the impact of the potential benefits of your work might be measured.
My Answer
Since Nigeria's independence in October 1960, mass literacy had been on the front burner of the country's educational policy. Right from 1970's, there had been proliferation of policies to reposition educational system within the country. As a result of recognition of the importance of an educated nation, privatization and commercialization efforts had been a running war to reposition public education through various measures in order to provide qualitative education, accommodate increased interest; as well as compete with other nation's academic system.
In spite of undying zest for improvement of public educational system at all levels in the country, less had been achieved over the years. Service delivery just like most public sectors within the country had been very inadequate. Minimum results are being achieved compared to huge efforts. However this failure cannot be isolated from inadequate managerial and professional manpower in the sector. No doubt, for policy enacted to come to fruition, the administrative structures created for its implementation must be handled by adequate professionals. This connote that for Nigerian government to accomplish its goals aimed at national development through education, public administrative structures which focuses in the implementation of public sectors policies; must receive utmost attention.
My quest to engage in the race of moving Nigerian public sectors forward, especially the educational sector which determines the 'products' of the society led to my study of Public Administration at undergraduate level. The knowledge I had gained in comparative administration and my desire to advance my career in the field, is the reason for my decision to continue at a postgraduate level which will create an avenue for me to build upon my analytical and problem solving skills which the study offers.
Without doubt, I believe if I am considered for this scholarship, the skills to be taught in Queen Mary University of London and the postgraduate degree I will obtain, on my return after my studies I will join the Public institution as a university lecturer which will provide an avenue for me to participate in teaching, research and helping the government to develop and implement its policies geared towards citizens welfare.
The skills I will acquire through the scholarship will help me achieve my career and professional goals, towards repositioning Nigerian public education system for prompt and efficient service delivery that will enhance social economic development.
Finally, with the knowledge I will gather, I hope to contribute to national development by creating an awareness programme to enlighten and eradicate phobia held by most parents especially in the Northern part of Nigeria about Western education, and the need to avail their children opportunities provided by the government. This in effect will reduce the rate of illiteracy and encourage mass education including Girl Child education which the country aspires for.