Please help me review this essay and rate the quality.thank youHow does your proposed plan of study relates to a development need.
Say how on your return, you would apply your skills and knowledge and what outcome you hope to achieve.
How would the potential benefits on the impact be measured.
Counting on a job in the Nigerian ministry of health
Not everything that counts in life can be counted and the value of good health is unquantifiable. I grew up fascinated by the prospect of being in a position to assist my country, Nigeria and our people who suffer from an extremely undeveloped healthcare system that serves mostly the rich. As an important element of national development and security, public health not only functions to provide adequate and timely medicalcare but also track, monitor, and control disease outbreak. It's unfortunate that year after year, issues of HIV, tuberculosis, maternal-child death, child mortality with a high case of malaria continue to cause havoc in the public health sector. Hence, there is need to tackle these problems. Today, an estimated 100million malaria cases and about 300,000 deaths each year make Nigeria the country with the highest number of malaria casualties worldwide. Malaria is responsible for 60% of outpatients visits to health facilities, 30% of childhood deaths, 25% of deaths in children under one year and 11% of maternal deaths. Despite the so many gains in malaria prevention and treatment, the widespread prevalence of counterfeit, substandard medicines, malpractices and corruption are contributing to the alarmingly high number of malaria deaths and costs of healthcare in Nigeria. Studying a Master's in Public Health and Health Promotion in XXXXX university would be a timely achievement with respect to Nigeria's quest to recover from issues deteriorating the public health sector of the economy.
Upon completion of this course, I am sure to avail a position within the Federal Ministry of Health to assist in development and implementation of new methods to promote and maintain public health that are economically grounded, culturally feasible and realistic. Asides securing a job, I will startup a foundation, its objectives are to collaborate with "National Primary Healthcare Development Agency" to achieve low cost primary healthcare centers in Nigeria and "Malaria action Programme for states" together with "National malaria control Programme" to carry out projects on health promotion at different rural/urban communities in the country fighting against Malaria. Not only will attention be given to malaria but also to other infectious/chronic diseases. The outcome of this project would give people access to quality primary healthcare centers at community levels. Through this project, people would not only be enlightened but also protect themselves and children against Malaria thereby giving room to achieve the nation's priority of a "Malaria Free Nigeria".
In respect to how the success of my works would be measured, this would be seen in an increased growth of low cost primary healthcare centers starting from the northern region as these ones makeup the impoverished population of Nigeria, building new ones and equipping existing ones. Also, through successful completion of projects on health promotion/outreach and distribution of health related materials to ensure a Malaria free Nigeria and prevention from other diseases. After each implemented project, there would be a follow up after few months to get feedback from service users and these would be uploaded on website/social media platforms.