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I hope to purse a PhD program so as to embrace a teaching career. Statement for PTDF Scholarship


okorobiadimma14 6 / 82 50  
Dec 12, 2016   #1
Finally, please state in not more than 600 words in the space provided below:

1. Why you wish to acquire this scholarship.

2. Why you wish to obtain the qualification listed as your choice (for M.Sc. candidates) and that of your chosen research area (for PhD candidates), and;

3. How you think you will benefit in terms of your career and personal development from obtaining this scholarship and the resulting qualification once you have returned to you home country.

Please also give full details of any particular areas in which you like to concentrate as part of your course of study research while on your program overseas.


My experience about life and success made me see my father's death as a painful blessing. I started my academic journey in high school as a topper in my class, particularly in Mathematics, Chemistry, and Biology. But through my father's tragic demise, which certainly posed great challenge to my academic pursuit, life taught me that perseverance is my only lifeline and means to a successful career.

Being the first son, I began to assist my mother with family up-keep as a teenager. I engage in several menial jobs including serving mason and working as a Labourer at Golden Oil Industries Limited. Combining this responsibility with my studies honed my time managing skills even though I never had ample leisure like my peers. Throughout my high school and university days, I had difficulty with paying tuition fees. I surmounted this problem by working tirelessly for money during vacations. Thus, I am a very hard worker. I do not work only to accomplish my parent's desires or to rise up high in society, I work hard because I feel that the struggles before me existed so that I may grow into a better person. Obtaining PTDF scholarship will help me to advance my studies to attain master's degree, this time, without financial impediments.

Acquiring a master's degree in Biotechnology for Environmental Sustainability from a UK university will assist in building my EQ and IQ with the template of excellence that already exists in the university community, especially in the area of Environmental Biotechnology. It has always been my dream to research on sustainable approach to cleaning crude oil polluted regions in Nigeria. During my undergraduate research project, currently published in Annals of Science and Technology, I worked on utilizing local soap-derived biosurfactant for degradation of petroleum hydrocarbon polluted soils in view of sustainable remediation. I was glad when I heard that the project report was one of those chosen to be showcased at the 2015 National University Commission's University Research Fair at Akwa Ibom.

The opportunity of master's program overseas will help me to acquire skills on the production of renewable energy from biological sources by applying biotechnological techniques. It will not only facilitate my ability to undertake an outstanding independent research, but also offer me the opportunity to work with state-of-the-art facilities. My area of research will explore the sustainable approach to the cleaning up of crude oil polluted soils, and how innovative expertise can be employed in downstream production through biotechnology to reduce the risk of elevated atmospheric CO2.

Ultimately, I aspire to pursue a career in academia and satisfy my passion for research and teaching in a higher education institution. This scholarship will avail me a prospect for collaborative research with my UK alma mater under the auspices of UK established West Africa Science and Innovation Network based in Lagos. Certainly, the academic writing skills I would gain from the master's program will help me to contribute to the quest for sustainable crude oil pollution management in Nigeria. I hope to hone my expertise in environmental biotechnology and become a consultant in biotechnological approach to petroleum hydrocarbon pollution remediation.

Having acquired some level of professional experience as a Research Scientist, I hope to purse a PhD program so as to embrace a teaching career. I have a great passion to pass on my academic success through teaching and mentoring young people. Giving back to my community through research and human capacity building is my contribution towards sustainable development of my country.

I sincerely thank you for your time and consideration for this prestigious award. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,919 4799  
Dec 12, 2016   #2
Okoye, the overall essay actually works well towards representing the necessary responses to the prompt guide questions. However, the first part of your essay that deals with the death of your father, your being the first in your family to go on to higher learning, etc. does not really have a place in this essay. It removes the focus from the necessary information and forces the reviewer to deviate from the prompt requirements while reading your essay. It would certainly benefit your paper if you simply omit that unnecessary background and just allow the essay to immediately deliver the necessary responses starting with your current 3rd paragraph.

When an essay offers guide questions to help you focus your response, deviating from the discussion from the very beginning tells the reviewer one thing alone, you are not capable of following the simplest of instructions and yet to aspire to study and complete a masters degree course. He will not have the confidence that you can actually perform well as an MS student if you can't even follow the simplest of essay instructions for your application.

There is a misconception that offering information not required by the prompt, specially at the start of the essay makes it stronger. It does nothing of the sort. It just makes the reviewer decide, early on, that your application is not worth reading. The aim of the essay is to get the reviewer to consider your pertinent information in relation to the prompt requirements. So do not deviate from the prompt. Directness is key in such information intensive essays.

Do not waste the potential of your essay. Your responses are very informative and portrays a real image of a person whose desire to help his mother country is admirable to say the very least. Just remove the unnecessary portion and the essay should be ready to submit.


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