Hi, i am going to apply for open society scholarship foundation, I do need any constructive critic, correction for my essay. thank for your invaluable assistance
Why have you chosen to study this academic programme? (up to 150 words)
Taking a master degree on human right law which specifically focus on child issues at the University of Nottingham has interested me most because firstly, it allows me to shape and exercise my analytical, theoretical and research skills on human right law especially that related to child issues and look at existing legal and regimes related to the issues more critically and from wider perspective e.g. international, regional and national levels which In turn will substantially help me in my future work. Secondly, I want to contribute in assisting Indonesian government in overcoming any issues relates to children by providing social services to children and their families especially in isolated and neglected areas as well as educational services to potential government bodies.
How will this scholarship benefit you and your country? (up to 50 words)
The scholarship will enable me to develop and gain theoretical, practical and research skills on human right law especially related to child issues and look at them from wider scopes which in turn will help me to practise them in my future work to assist Indonesian government in overcoming any issues relates to children by providing social services to children and their families especially in isolated and neglected areas as well as educational services to potential government bodies. Furthermore, Indonesia is essentially need competent experts on human right especially related to child issues because it is a signatory state to CRC and is still exercising transitional democracy to substantial democracy, therefore, government agencies and community at large need to be enhanced their capacities and awareness continuously on how to address these issues more pertinently to local context and human right- based.
Why have you chosen to study in the UK? (up to 150 words)
There are a number of reasons why I wish to study in UK. Firstly, I have strong wish to study at the University of Nottingham since it is the University that internationally recognized for its teaching and research especially on law subject. In addition, its teaching staffs are well-known internationally and are as front liners on human right grounds who significantly have contributed to promotion on human right issues around the globes. Secondly, Universities in UK particularly, the Nottingham university provides students a well-rounded education that will assist them meet their career aspiration and life goal not just completing university but well into the future. Thirdly, UK has long been becoming as the destination country for international students around the globes so that it will give me a wonderful opportunity to enhance my connection internationally which in turn will assist me in my future work as well as enrich experience diverse cultures.
Dear, all colleagues,
First of all, I do thank for Mr. Akhil who has commented on my essay, however, to be honest, I am not confident enough with that essay, so, is that anyone else who willing to give their invaluable constructive critique on my essay? I am going to submit it on the 2nd week of this month.
Thank a lot
Apid
