Learning and gaining experience participating in various British courses

Hi Guys! This is my essay for the Study in the UK question of Chevening. I would appreaciate your feedback.

Chevening Study in the UK question

I got my Bachelor degree in general jurisprudence at the K University which offered the broadest legal curriculum with subjects from various fields of law. By the second year, I discovered a genuine interest in commercial law. For this reason, I chose private law courses whenever possible and wrote research papers on commercial law issues. During my studies in the University of F I also focused on international commercial law. I wrote my diploma thesis on business law.

As Contracts Analyst, I managed to strengthen my knowledge of Law of Obligations and some aspects of Corporate Law, and acquired knowledge of English Law on Contracts and Indemnities. At the same time, I discovered there are many legal challenges to international companies doing business in my country such as regulation of merger and acquisitions, financing, corporate governance and dispute resolution. Currently I don't have an opportunity to apply my knowledge of these civil law concepts , let alone develop expertise in those. I realized that I would like to work at a company whose core business is practice of law to develop in a full capacity as a lawyer. For this reason, I see legal consulting as a next step in my career path. To enter into legal consulting I feel that I need to strengthen my academic and professional background with knowledge of International Business or Commercial Law that consists of a few core courses.

Namely, I would like to take a study Mergers and Acquisitions to acquire knowledge on the procedure of a merger or a takeover, deal structuring and related regulations. Module on International Arbitration will allow me to discover the details of alternative dispute resolution procedures, differences between various arbitration bodies such as London Court of International Arbitration and International Chamber of Commerce and enforcement of arbitral awards. I also wish to study Company Law to obtain knowledge of corporate governance and approach to corporations in the UK with my country's Laws on Corporations. I would also like to take a course on Financial or Banking Law to get a solid understanding of regulation of various financial undertakings including loans, project funding and issuance of bonds.

I chose LLM courses at A University, B University and C University, because their academic offer seems most appealing and promising to me that would enable me to draft an ideal International Commercial Law curriculum. All the three universities are among the best in the UK for the quality of legal education and research.

Secondly, all the three universities are highly internationalized which is a huge plus.
Lastly, A University and B University are located in London close to offices of governmental bodies and legal firms that allows an opportunity to participate in various legal events frequently.

To sum up, I am sure that either of these three courses will help me acquire crucial knowledge of International Commercial Law and relevant practical skills, and make me a perfect fit for any top tier international law firm in my country.

... OR PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE AND YOUR PLANS FOR THE FUTURE.

i cant find your future plans in this essay and mean while you should also clearly outline the three courses. this is just my observations.

Adil, your presentation is too summarized to give the reviewer a complete idea as to why you chose the individual universities. Do not summarize the discussion even though they apply to all your ideals for choosing these courses. Explain what specific parts of the core curriculum attracts you to the course. Why at this university? It isn't enough that the universities are internationally known and that two of them are located in central London. You have to base your choice of university on teaching specifics and training opportunities. How else can the reviewer decide, based upon your submitted documents, which university you are truly suited for? Remember, even with an early acceptance, Chevening reserves the right to choose your university of attendance. So be specific in your discussion. If you are leaning towards attending a particular university then make that your first choice and strengthen your reasons for wishing to attend that university in particular. Spread out your presentation with regards to your educational and professional background. Use the professional aspect at the start because that ties in with your course choices. Place your academic foundation as the closing remarks because by then, you will already discussed your future plans and the education will best support those claims when placed in that section.

Hi, @nemezidus

Thanks for giving me your suggestion in my essay.

Here is my thought on your essay. Your idea of writing down in details the courses you would like to enroll is brilliant. However, I think your first and second paragraphs should not be the highlight of your essay. It would have been better if you could elaborate more and in detail about each university you choose.

Good luck on your application :)

@Holt
Mary, thank you again for your feedback! At fist I was leaning towards a detailed course review, but was advised by one of the awardees to reconsider and rather summarize. Though I feel that this is not the best approach. So I agree with your suggestion. I have revised my essay. Would appreciate your feedback.

To begin with, As Client Contracts Analyst, I have acquired solid knowledge of national Law of Obligations and Contracts, and mastered major aspects of English Law on Contracts and Indemnities. Currently I don't have an opportunity to apply my knowledge of other concepts of Civil Law such as Finance Law, Corporate Law and Dispute resolution, let alone gain expertise in those. To develop in a full capacity as a lawyer, I see legal consulting as a next step in my career path. To join legal consulting, I need to have a better command of a gamut of fields of Law that can be collectively referred to as International Commercial Law.

Namely, I would like to take a module on Mergers and Acquisitions to acquire knowledge on deal structuring and statutory restrictions to these transactions. Course on International Arbitration will allow me to discover the details of alternative dispute resolution and enforcement of arbitral awards. I also wish to study Company Law to obtain knowledge of international approach to regulation of corporations. Financial or Banking Law would provide me with a solid understanding of the schemes of project funding and issuance of bonds.

After a rigorous research, I chose LLM courses at the University College London (UCL), Queen Mary University London (QMUL) and Durham University (DU).
Master of Laws programme at UCL is my first choice. UCL School of Law is recognized for the quality of teaching in Law. I like that the programme has only one core course and over 70 optional courses including the core courses I mentioned above. It is great that the programme allows students to write a research essay on a self-selected topic.

International Business Law at QMUL offers great optional courses too. I like that the university has a two-week induction period. I would like to take Law of Finance and Foreign Investment in Emerging Economies course that I feel it would be relevant to Kazakhstani reality.

LLM in International Trade and Commercial Law offered by the DU has great year-long advanced courses such as Advanced Issues in International Economic Law and Advanced Law of Obligations. I believe this would help me gain profound knowledge of the subject. There are also optional courses I find promising such as International Investment Law.

I like that QMUL and DU both have special communities for research in Commercial Law.
Location of the UCL and QMUL in London offers a great opportunity to attend to various professional legal events frequently.
I got my Bachelor of LAW degree in General jurisprudence at the K University with a focus on commercial law. I chose private law courses whenever possible and wrote my diploma thesis on business law.

To sum up, I have always wanted be a professional commercial lawyer and I am sure that either of these three courses will help me acquire crucial knowledge of International Commercial Law and relevant practical skills, and make me a perfect fit for any top tier international law firm in my country..

Adil, this is a strong presentation of your course choices. While I feel that the future use per course in your career should be more developed, as the prompt does ask you to specify how each course will help you enhance you future career, you did do a summary presentation as an overall career objective so that is acceptable. I makes the essay unique and interesting in a way. The location of the two universities are not really relevant to the reasons why you chose these universities though and can be omitted in the presentation. If you have academic awards and accolades from your college days, that could further enhance your ability to complete any of these courses that you have chosen. Your academic profile can use some building up. After all, your professional discussion is one of the strong points of your essay.