Self Introduction - this is my essay to Korean Government Scholarship Programme
I am Sewwandi Manisha, born in Colombo, Sri Lanka, has completed my bachelor degree at University of Colombo School of Computing. I live in a small and beautiful and historically valued town with my parents and my only sister. My father is a retired government servant and mother is a housewife. My educational aspirations consist of acquiring a Masters Degree in Information Systems or any relevant field that would assist me in pursuing my career goal.
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However, I would not be at this level in my education without my Parents' support., W without my Father's emotional and economic assistance and my Mother's un-weaving love and passion, .
...Junior and again Senior Prefect, a positions that I valued for the opportunities and learning experiences it offered in terms of being a responsible leader while also helping and motivating other students. Secondary education was therefore an enjoyable experience for me, especially my Advanced Level Classes, in which I was fortunate to have caring and inspirational teachers. This love of studying led to me shineexcel in my extra-curricular activities as well, such as electingbeing elected for several considerable posts in school societies etc.
.Me as the eldest daughter of the family I needed to take care of them. Sometimes I thought about giving up my studies. At those times it occurred to me that it was very important to make my parents proud by continuing my education, even if it required a longer timeperiod .
I do not in any way regret my investment in my education, in the long run it will be beneficial to me regardless of its monetary costs or gains. Many of my friends ended up dropping out of the degree.
I'd like to embark upon an educational journey to beautiful South Korea, one of the "Four Tigers of East Asia." According to what I've encountered on the Internet, itsthe academic environment is highly competitive while its people are very serious about their studies. Korea's information and communication technology is considered to be one of the best worldwide. It is especially notable for expertise in IT and Robotics and seems therefore a suitable direction to achieve my long-timeterm academic and professional goals. (I suggest you to add a couple of sentences to this paragraph, you should let know the reader that you have done some research and have information about this programme. )
I have faced many challenges, balancing work and school, and I have willingly given my time. My goal is to become aan expert in IT so that I can perform tasks that clients cannot do for themselves. (Try to elaborate more on your goals and what you want to achieve after finishing your studies,mention a few goals, how will this scholarship help you achieve your goals?) I know that when I reach my goals, I will be able to provide something meaningful to all of the society including my mother land, Sri Lanka as well as Korea. Korean Government Scholarship Program and grants will assist in achieving my goals through supporting expenses from airfare to dissertation printing cost, and this would be something even unimaginable. ....
I think you are on the right track, however as these type of scholarship applications are quite competitive so you should put an emphasis on your capabilities and skills. They should decide based on this letter and other documents decide why they should choose you instead of other applicants .
Good luck with your application!