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All my life decisions so far only go in one direction. (4 Question essays on Biotechnology)



fantomas_fls 1 / 1  
Nov 13, 2014   #1
Hi everyone, I just finish answering questions from Chevening. The deadline is close and I really appreciate your feedback, from both grammar error and content.

1. Your personal statement: Explain why you are applying to the Chevening programme and describe the personal, intellectual and interpersonal qualities that make you well placed to be a future leader in your home country.

It is the definition of who we are that drives us into our way in life. All my life decisions so far only go in one direction. I have always wanted to become a scientist, and I believe I was meant to be one. My love for biology started back in secondary school. Even though I landed in Lamson High School for gifted pupil in physic and spend most of the time studying physic and math, I still continued grown my curiosity in the science of life. Graduated high school, I applied for Biotechnology of Hanoi University of Science to pursuit my own interest.

I started my academic career in Environmental Bioremediation Laboratory, Institute of Biotechnology, Vietnam Academy of Science and Technology (VAST). For the first time, I was able to conduct my experiments independently. Those researches gave me an opportunity to work with great minds of the world under international level. They also helped me developing necessary skills for a scientist such as organizing, team working, and especially in critical thinking and problem solving.

With the rapidly growing of technology, I knew that I have to undertake more advance studies to further my career interest. Vietnam is still a developing country with the limitation in technology. Therefore, I want to take the next step in my academic life abroad under a worldly and open-mined perspective, in a professional environment with high technology. UK with many top university in the world in the field of science is the dream place for me to achieve my ambition. When I finish my program, I believe I will be able to stand on the cutting-edge of biotechnology and take a big step on my way of becoming a leader in my country.

2. Your academic background: Describe your educational achievements to date. You should explain why you feel confident in your ability to successfully complete your proposed courses of study in the UK, and specify why your courses were chosen.

From elemental school throughout secondary school, I was always the best pupil in the class. It was not a surprise when I easily passed the exam to enter Lamson High School for gifted pupil, one of the most famous school in Vietnam.

At undergraduate level, while finishing my thesis at VNU Institute of Microbiology and Biotechnology, I had my first public paper in Annual report of International center for Biotechnology, Osaka University. Three years working as assistance researcher at Institute of Biotechnology, I was co-author of four public papers, one in Journal of Biology, one in Journal of Biotechnology, and two others in Toxicology. I also won the first pride in Scientific Conference for Young Researcher of Institute of Biotechnology, Vietnam Academy of Science and Technology 2013.

Involving in one military project of detoxification of dioxin/herbicide soil and a government research of decolouration of textile dyes in wastewaters, I realized the challenges we are all facing in environmental pollutant. I believe applied biotechnology is the key in the future of environmental remediation. That is the reason why I chose Biotechnology and Biotechnology for Environmental Sustainability as my courses to study in UK. These courses surely will provide me knowledge and insight into the applied science fields. With my previous experiences, I am confident that I could successfully complete my Master program in whichever course I have selected.

3. Your leadership and networking skills: Outline your experience and style of leadership. You should discuss your commitment to networking within the Chevening community, and beyond, in order to find solutions or bring about beneficial change.

"Not necessary to be the best, but need to be the best we can" has always been my principle in leadership. I believe a leader is a person that could bring out the best in any single members. Since the third year of college, I had been the leader of many seminar groups in my class. The key to get success in these seminars was get to know the potential of every members in my group first. When I could be able of distinguish them, it was much easier to divine the work for everyone. As a leader, my responsibility was summarize information from my peers before gave out the final presentation. These experiences helped me to develop my skills in combination, organization, and communication.

In the laboratory, I was in charge of Molecular Biology group and was the leader in several field trips. In these positions, I gained an understanding that become a leader is not only just capable of getting the work effectively done but also to be able of sharing knowledge and guiding people in the right direction. Without a doubt, this experience will help me become a better leader in the future.

Within my work, I already have chances to connect with many environmental scientists in the world. Becoming a Chevening scholar, I would have a chance to meet and discuss with other alumni, build up a link system between them. Together, we could help to bring out solution for global problems, especially in nature balance and environment.

4. Your career plan and benefit to your home country: Describe your immediate plans upon completion of your Chevening award. You should explain your longer-term (5-10 year) career objectives and describe how your time in the UK will help you achieve these. You should also discuss how a Chevening award would benefit you and your home country.

Awarding Chevening scholarship will enable me to achieve my dream studying in United Kingdom. By completing the chosen program, I will have a strong ground knowledge in Biotechnology that allow me to go further in my career. Moreover, the experience I get from my time study in UK would definitely set me apart in the path of becoming leader in my field of interest.

After completing Chevening award, my immediate plan is get back to research on the field of bioremediation, where I could applied knowledge obtained from my master course. Vietnam is facing serious problem from soil and water pollutants. I hope that with my new abilities, I could take a part in finding solutions for current environmental situation. Along with that, I expect to continue to participate in the cooperation between BE-BASIC, Netherland and VAST in order of building a bio-based industry and increasing sustainability and economic return on present waste materials from Vietnam's agriculture. When I have a chance, I would pursuit a doctor degree to be able of designing and performing independently my own ideal in research. Finally, I want to get a position in a university, where I could engage in teaching and inspiring next generation of student. Vietnam needs to come forward in science and technology, and we will need more and more passionate scientist.

Nastasi 3 / 9  
Nov 13, 2014   #2
Q.1 It is the definition of who we are that drives us into our way in life. don't quite get it. what is "it", what does it stand for?

I have always wanted to become a scientist, and I believe I was meant to be one. this 1 is really good.
"Even though ... still" - what do you contradict? - "landed" sounds like you literally landed from UFO. better change it to some other verb pupil -- students (pupils are in primary school and kindergarten) in physic -- PhysicS (capital P and plural s) and spend -- spenT (irregular past tense)

continued growngrowing my curiosity in the science. of lifeHaving g raduated from high
pursuit [it's a noun] pursue [that's a verb] my own
Those researches gave me an opportunity to work with great minds of the world under international level. Not the researches give opportunities but people, institutions, jobs [pick 1 that applies] better say sth like "to work with the international standarts under the supervision of world's greatest minds"

" in critical" expand this one - give some examples of how exactly you've gained these skills.
State why your country needs biotechnology and how your researches are important for the country not just for you
I guess this way you'd exceed the word limit but you could cut the 1st paragraph, make it 1 sentence
Nastasi 3 / 9  
Nov 13, 2014   #3
Q.2 VNU - in the brackets explain the meaning of abbreviation they wouldn't want to waste time guessing what VNU stands for

all together - you have apellingand gramatical mistakes ans most of them could be chacked in google. I can see you're using the expresions typical for your language, native speakers use different pronouns and also you confuse plural & singular "everyone" IS singular. Sorry I don't have more time to comment more now cuz I have to finish my own answers for Chevening. Btw I'd be grateful if you could comment on mine as well. Mistakes have already been corrected by other people so I need to know about the content
OP fantomas_fls 1 / 1  
Nov 14, 2014   #4
Thanks Natasi, I 've never really attended any English class, so I don't feel much confident with my grammar :)
Even ..though: I mean that I still interest in biology (science of life) when study others
"State why your country needs biotechnology and how your researches are important for the country not just for you": I think this is in the 4th question


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