Please help me. I'd like to know if it is good enough to submit! Scholarship essay, due tonight. Thanks!
List and describe the 5 factors (events, accomplishments, failures, circumstances, special relationships, etc) that have most shaped who you are. (100 words max per description) *
Death of Nanny
My nanny died when I was nine. She had been my nanny since birth. This event is marked in my mind so well because it represents a new chapter in my life. Until my nanny past away, I was dependent on adults. While her death brought sorrow to my heart, it also opened the doors to my independence. I learned to walk to school and back alone, and to stay home alone. In that time of solitude, I learned much about computers becoming more technologically competent than my peers. Her death marked the end of my absolute reliance to grown-ups.
Chatting with Dad
My father talks a lot. Sometimes the words that my father speaks are necessary and other times...he should have kept his lips sealed. But my conversations with him are what I like to think of as his greatest virtue. Unlike other parents, my father speaks to me plainly, giving me advice on everything and anything. He has shaped who I am because he can foresee upon things that come to pass. My father is the lens of experience that I look through - it is tinted with cynicism and pragmatism. When I look through them I am never disappointed.
MTA, going my way?
NYC subways are disgusting. That is a fact. It is because of this that I detest traveling by train. But how can a train ride change your life? For me it is quite simple. I often find myself obligated to eat, sleep and study on the train - trains that smell like public bathroom and dirty metal. I waste a total of 3 hours everyday traveling on those filthy trains. This is an obstacle I fight daily. It has made me into a durable and adaptable person. If I can adapt to NYC subway systems, I can adapt to anything.
Parent's Economic Struggle
My parents have worked hard all of their lives. They have worked for me. They have worked so that I may one day become better than them, to live better than them. Yet, while they believe that if I become successful I will be happy, I think otherwise. My parents' struggle has helped me realize that the purpose to life is to serve others. They are happy because they work to serve me. My happiness with not come from my success - it will come from helping humanity. My parents' economic struggle has shaped my ideas of what life means.
From Quiet to Loud
I was a quiet student. I was the student that said nothing and observed everything. Yet, it wasn't until high school that I was missing out on something. I was missing out on having a voice - an opinion. In high school I realized that I wanted to share my ideas. That I wanted to say something but I was afraid. But then one day something changed. I began to voice my ideas, my questions, and my observations. This change in me has shaped someone more confident in her work and in her ideas. It has made me believe in me.
List and describe the 5 factors (events, accomplishments, failures, circumstances, special relationships, etc) that have most shaped who you are. (100 words max per description) *
Death of Nanny
My nanny died when I was nine. She had been my nanny since birth. This event is marked in my mind so well because it represents a new chapter in my life. Until my nanny past away, I was dependent on adults. While her death brought sorrow to my heart, it also opened the doors to my independence. I learned to walk to school and back alone, and to stay home alone. In that time of solitude, I learned much about computers becoming more technologically competent than my peers. Her death marked the end of my absolute reliance to grown-ups.
Chatting with Dad
My father talks a lot. Sometimes the words that my father speaks are necessary and other times...he should have kept his lips sealed. But my conversations with him are what I like to think of as his greatest virtue. Unlike other parents, my father speaks to me plainly, giving me advice on everything and anything. He has shaped who I am because he can foresee upon things that come to pass. My father is the lens of experience that I look through - it is tinted with cynicism and pragmatism. When I look through them I am never disappointed.
MTA, going my way?
NYC subways are disgusting. That is a fact. It is because of this that I detest traveling by train. But how can a train ride change your life? For me it is quite simple. I often find myself obligated to eat, sleep and study on the train - trains that smell like public bathroom and dirty metal. I waste a total of 3 hours everyday traveling on those filthy trains. This is an obstacle I fight daily. It has made me into a durable and adaptable person. If I can adapt to NYC subway systems, I can adapt to anything.
Parent's Economic Struggle
My parents have worked hard all of their lives. They have worked for me. They have worked so that I may one day become better than them, to live better than them. Yet, while they believe that if I become successful I will be happy, I think otherwise. My parents' struggle has helped me realize that the purpose to life is to serve others. They are happy because they work to serve me. My happiness with not come from my success - it will come from helping humanity. My parents' economic struggle has shaped my ideas of what life means.
From Quiet to Loud
I was a quiet student. I was the student that said nothing and observed everything. Yet, it wasn't until high school that I was missing out on something. I was missing out on having a voice - an opinion. In high school I realized that I wanted to share my ideas. That I wanted to say something but I was afraid. But then one day something changed. I began to voice my ideas, my questions, and my observations. This change in me has shaped someone more confident in her work and in her ideas. It has made me believe in me.