I have to write an essay for a scholarship in Australia and I'd like to have some help. I'm struggling to write it and I think it is weak :~
Can someone help?
Please provide details of how your proposed programme would further your academic and/or professional career. (200 words)
The proposed programme would give me a more in-depth understanding of the economics and mathematical principles that govern the modeling and management of pension benefits, general and healthcare insurance. This strong education, associated with my previous work experiences would give me the required background to become a well-rounded actuary and to become the strong professional I want to be. Also, being able to pursue the proposed Master's degree would give me an important professional advantage over others actuaries in Brazil, as there are not postgraduates programs in this field there and many actuaries have not had the opportunity to study abroad to enrich their skills. Additionally, the programme is well-regarded by industry in Australia, which allows me to get a summer internship in Sydney and further even more my career.
Moreover, it offers a research unit for those interested in Academia. This option, coupled with my previous research experiences as an undergraduate researcher as well as during my bachelor's report allows me to achieve my academic ambitions of pursuing a PhD a become a researcher in the field of Population Ageing and how this can impact healthcare costs and retirement benefits to society.
P.S.: My first language is not English so please, correct if you find mistakes =)
Can someone help?
Please provide details of how your proposed programme would further your academic and/or professional career. (200 words)
The proposed programme would give me a more in-depth understanding of the economics and mathematical principles that govern the modeling and management of pension benefits, general and healthcare insurance. This strong education, associated with my previous work experiences would give me the required background to become a well-rounded actuary and to become the strong professional I want to be. Also, being able to pursue the proposed Master's degree would give me an important professional advantage over others actuaries in Brazil, as there are not postgraduates programs in this field there and many actuaries have not had the opportunity to study abroad to enrich their skills. Additionally, the programme is well-regarded by industry in Australia, which allows me to get a summer internship in Sydney and further even more my career.
Moreover, it offers a research unit for those interested in Academia. This option, coupled with my previous research experiences as an undergraduate researcher as well as during my bachelor's report allows me to achieve my academic ambitions of pursuing a PhD a become a researcher in the field of Population Ageing and how this can impact healthcare costs and retirement benefits to society.
P.S.: My first language is not English so please, correct if you find mistakes =)