hello, i'm also applying for KGSP. My English is not so good. therefore I need help to convince them. Please give comments if there is any mistake. especially in grammar and meaning of essay. What I have to write is,
o Your course of life, your view of life, study background, your hopes & wishes, etc
o Your education and work experience, etc., in relation to the KGSP program
o Your motivations for applying for this program
o Reason for study in Korea.
My name is Oyunomin. First of all I want to say "There is no miracle in real life". Real life exists among thousands of competition. And I am a competitor who have to be assessed among them. Everything those including happiness, welfare, and wealth is created by myself, by my hand. So I always try to improve my cognition, skills, especially standpoint about the life. My realization about the life began when I couldn't apply the job which I want to,after hold a bachelor diploma because of my lack of education and experience. Then I realized that I really need to develop myself for being satisfied myself. I began to dream to become highbrow who is responsible, confident and preferential person in social environment. So I framed 3 rules in my mind for my happy future. These are 1) to learn from life, 2) struggle becoming valuable person, 3) study as possible as I can to top out. Since I started race against time, therefore I am always in time where I have to be. My personal achievements exceed beyond school, however. But it was better late than never.
I was born in year of the Mongolian Revolution which was a democratic peaceful revolution. I feel grateful for destiny to raising in democratic country. In my early age, I was the one who responsible to take care of my brother who is 5 years younger than me, because our parents were busy with their work in order to earn money to support our living expenses. My mother is one who encourages me keep learning and upgrading ourselves with knowledge. She always supports us to become successful person. We had learnt to be independent where we did everything by ourselves without letting our parents worried. I think, it made me feel about responsibility for the first time.
I graduated from 14th high school with a 95.43%, ranking third amongst my schoolmates. Then I entered at Mongolian University of Science and Technology as a Business Administration in Tourism management. Not only was I involved with academic classes, I also worked in a restaurant approximately 30 hours a week in order to provide own daily expenditure. It was hard in the beginning, but later my daily routine became more easier due to I scheduled the time precisely. In addition, in my undergraduate year I learned to work in team because we are undertook the assignments by team.
It is obvious to me, I'm going to gain great experience such as being responsible, straightforward and innovator as long as I work in company. I started working Swiss Agency for Development and Cooperation as an office manager with one year contract. From the beginning of my working day what I have found is to pick co-workers brain and to be innovator. I always necessitated to mud up. Indeed I have learned to work others through this experience and it has shaped me into a responsible adult. Most importantly that job gave me enthusiasm to learn foreign language. So I went to India to study English language within 6 months. Regardless of radical decision shift in culture and educational system, I excelled in my new setting. I graduated from Texas institute of India in 2014 as an intermediate-advanced level of English, ranking first of classmates. When I came back hometown I studied at National Academy of Governance implementing Agency of Government of Mongolia as a master degree of Public administration. I was one of the best researcher among the classmates and it is always proved that teachers have rewarded me top score. Being the best student with on-hands experiences and interpersonal skills would be firm benchmark for my further education and work. I graduated from academy in June 2016 with a 3.5 GPA. The subject for a thesis was "Relevance between performance indicator and appraisal of government employee ". Luckily 2015-2016 was progressive years of my life. While in academy I managed to take challenging courses for specializing my profession because I thought that I have to know about characters of people to maintain friendly relations in every field. I studied in Mongolian Human Resource Management Innovation Academy as a Human resource manager, secretary, and archival official. I had been a monitor of class who responsible for others, lead classmates, and manage teamwork. Besides I studied in Narumi makeup studio as a professional makeup artist because I really interested in make-up. After ended makeup course I have invited to work as artist in make-up studio which I studied, and work there from 5 a.m until 12 p.m everyday. I have managed all these activities simultaneously because of my willing to live wire and to be learner. Through all of these experiences I have learned to act as a leader, work in groups, and organize my time appropriately.
I needed to take a break from studying while my child was born, but I am now re-energized to return to school to study more, and gain the knowledge and skills I need to pursue my dream. Now my aim is to study in Korea and learn about its language and culture as well as gain the knowledge from high education system. In recent days, Mongolian-South Korean relations are rapidly intensifying. Korea and Mongolia share close racial, cultural and emotional ties, and are even called "brother countries". Based on this special relationship, the two countries have achieved remarkable progress over the last several years in the fields of politics, economics, trade and people-to-people relations. The relationship in the field of politics has been appealing my interest a lot. Because I chose to study the major in politics or international relations. During my study term I want to learn from experience of Korean development which is highly developed country and I have a strong will to lift a finger for development of my country in a years ahead. This is my ultimate goal to be a woman, I want to be. I am absolutely convinced that studying in Korea is a big opportunity to make my dream come true.
KGSP stands for what I believe in. To reach my goals, I need as much help as possible. I already have knowledge, but that is not quite enough to make my dream come true. I hope that your organization can help me reach this dream by awarding me your scholarship.
o Your course of life, your view of life, study background, your hopes & wishes, etc
o Your education and work experience, etc., in relation to the KGSP program
o Your motivations for applying for this program
o Reason for study in Korea.
Rules for the future
My name is Oyunomin. First of all I want to say "There is no miracle in real life". Real life exists among thousands of competition. And I am a competitor who have to be assessed among them. Everything those including happiness, welfare, and wealth is created by myself, by my hand. So I always try to improve my cognition, skills, especially standpoint about the life. My realization about the life began when I couldn't apply the job which I want to,after hold a bachelor diploma because of my lack of education and experience. Then I realized that I really need to develop myself for being satisfied myself. I began to dream to become highbrow who is responsible, confident and preferential person in social environment. So I framed 3 rules in my mind for my happy future. These are 1) to learn from life, 2) struggle becoming valuable person, 3) study as possible as I can to top out. Since I started race against time, therefore I am always in time where I have to be. My personal achievements exceed beyond school, however. But it was better late than never.
I was born in year of the Mongolian Revolution which was a democratic peaceful revolution. I feel grateful for destiny to raising in democratic country. In my early age, I was the one who responsible to take care of my brother who is 5 years younger than me, because our parents were busy with their work in order to earn money to support our living expenses. My mother is one who encourages me keep learning and upgrading ourselves with knowledge. She always supports us to become successful person. We had learnt to be independent where we did everything by ourselves without letting our parents worried. I think, it made me feel about responsibility for the first time.
I graduated from 14th high school with a 95.43%, ranking third amongst my schoolmates. Then I entered at Mongolian University of Science and Technology as a Business Administration in Tourism management. Not only was I involved with academic classes, I also worked in a restaurant approximately 30 hours a week in order to provide own daily expenditure. It was hard in the beginning, but later my daily routine became more easier due to I scheduled the time precisely. In addition, in my undergraduate year I learned to work in team because we are undertook the assignments by team.
It is obvious to me, I'm going to gain great experience such as being responsible, straightforward and innovator as long as I work in company. I started working Swiss Agency for Development and Cooperation as an office manager with one year contract. From the beginning of my working day what I have found is to pick co-workers brain and to be innovator. I always necessitated to mud up. Indeed I have learned to work others through this experience and it has shaped me into a responsible adult. Most importantly that job gave me enthusiasm to learn foreign language. So I went to India to study English language within 6 months. Regardless of radical decision shift in culture and educational system, I excelled in my new setting. I graduated from Texas institute of India in 2014 as an intermediate-advanced level of English, ranking first of classmates. When I came back hometown I studied at National Academy of Governance implementing Agency of Government of Mongolia as a master degree of Public administration. I was one of the best researcher among the classmates and it is always proved that teachers have rewarded me top score. Being the best student with on-hands experiences and interpersonal skills would be firm benchmark for my further education and work. I graduated from academy in June 2016 with a 3.5 GPA. The subject for a thesis was "Relevance between performance indicator and appraisal of government employee ". Luckily 2015-2016 was progressive years of my life. While in academy I managed to take challenging courses for specializing my profession because I thought that I have to know about characters of people to maintain friendly relations in every field. I studied in Mongolian Human Resource Management Innovation Academy as a Human resource manager, secretary, and archival official. I had been a monitor of class who responsible for others, lead classmates, and manage teamwork. Besides I studied in Narumi makeup studio as a professional makeup artist because I really interested in make-up. After ended makeup course I have invited to work as artist in make-up studio which I studied, and work there from 5 a.m until 12 p.m everyday. I have managed all these activities simultaneously because of my willing to live wire and to be learner. Through all of these experiences I have learned to act as a leader, work in groups, and organize my time appropriately.
I needed to take a break from studying while my child was born, but I am now re-energized to return to school to study more, and gain the knowledge and skills I need to pursue my dream. Now my aim is to study in Korea and learn about its language and culture as well as gain the knowledge from high education system. In recent days, Mongolian-South Korean relations are rapidly intensifying. Korea and Mongolia share close racial, cultural and emotional ties, and are even called "brother countries". Based on this special relationship, the two countries have achieved remarkable progress over the last several years in the fields of politics, economics, trade and people-to-people relations. The relationship in the field of politics has been appealing my interest a lot. Because I chose to study the major in politics or international relations. During my study term I want to learn from experience of Korean development which is highly developed country and I have a strong will to lift a finger for development of my country in a years ahead. This is my ultimate goal to be a woman, I want to be. I am absolutely convinced that studying in Korea is a big opportunity to make my dream come true.
KGSP stands for what I believe in. To reach my goals, I need as much help as possible. I already have knowledge, but that is not quite enough to make my dream come true. I hope that your organization can help me reach this dream by awarding me your scholarship.
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