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NTU SCHOLARSHIP, MY VALUES I Hold Strongly To - plus examples



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Jan 30, 2018   #1
Scholarship Essay For NTU:
Describe, In Less Than 300 Words, The Values And Beliefs You Hold Strongly To. Please Provide Examples Of How You Have Demonstrated These In Your Actions.

Being honest, perseverant and thankful


The most important thing during life, is being successful hiding nothing. Starting by not cheating during an exam, until accept when we made a mistake and never blame someone else for it. More than an exceptional quality is something that shows a great familiar upbringing and the best thing that you can find in anybody.

Having goals and trying to achieve them is something that takes time and dedication, but there is nothing beautiful than watch them being realized. From studying hard for a test, pass IB physics, to be elected as the student council president. That's why, I always remember a few words that my mom told me, the one who perseveres reaches everything he want.

Helping those that had helped you, is a sign of a high value person. That's why I want to give back to my parents all the effort that they have putted on me, giving them the satisfaction of having a son that studies with a scholarship on one of the best universities in the world and like that, come back to my country in a few years to help it in the process of growing and be an example to all the region.

Thanks to those values, I have achieved many goals. Now I have a new dream, study with a scholarship at the NTU, I know that I can handle that goal and that I have all the necessary things for that, I want to show the world that if you are a hardworking people, you can see your dreams fully realized. I know I haven't been always the best, but I will always be proud of my achievements, because I have done them with love and effort and I will work that way forever, wherever I be.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Jan 30, 2018   #2
Patricio, please stop mentioning the scholarship in every instance of your essay responses. You will irritate the reviewer and weaken your application. You are already applying for the scholarship. Leave it at that and do not mention it in any essay unless you are explicitly instructed to do so by the prompt. Anyway, this essay does not respond correctly to the prompt so you can't use any of the information you provided here. You have to write a new essay that focuses on one belief and one value system that you adhere to. For example:

I believe in the value of opportunity and the importance that it holds in the future of a person. My parents have been constantly offering me the opportunity to better my future by affording my education even though we are not financially well placed. That is why I have used the opportunity to show that their sacrifice is not wasted by doing my best academically. I have consistently taken the opportunity to earn academic awards and recognitions....

Notice how there is a veiled reference to the scholarship without actually mentioning it? That is how you should be framing your hope of getting the scholarship.

You can combine your beliefs and values into one descriptive word as I did above or, you can separate the two by indicating one value and one belief. However, the reviewers appreciate it when applicants can combine the two into one trait because it shortens the essay and is easier to peruse given the short time frame they have to consider your essay. That's why you are asked to do it in less than 300 words.

It would be better for your essay though if you focus on something other than your belief in an education and scholarship. The reviewers need variety in your essays because this is your formal interview. They won't get to know you better as a person if you keep discussing the same factors over and over again. Limiting the knowledge of the reviewer about who you are to only 2 of the same factors weakens your essay because your other abilities, character traits, and other considerations that would help paint a complete picture of who you are as a person doesn't come to light for consideration. There is no way for him to tell if you fit the unknown factors for scholarship applicant considerations.


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