The Proportion of overseas students graduated from universities in different Canadian provinces

A comparison of the number of the proportion alter in the number of overseas students graduated from universities in eight different Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006, a five-year period, is illustrated by the bar chart. Overall, the highest number of international students graduated was in New Brunswick. In any case, while the trends for international students graduated was dominated in 2006 for all provinces, Alberta shows a reverse.

Predominant the graduate students from foreign countries had experienced a great proportion in 2006 than in 2001. The difference was far marked, with 11.5% in 2006 and just 7% in 2001 for New Brunswick. Next, Nova Scotia and British Columbia had an equal percentage in the number of international students graduated, representing one in ten in the final period and virtually one in twenty in the beginning. Meanwhile, between 2001 and 2006, this figure witnessed at 6% and 8% respectively.

A more detailed look at the graph depicts that the overall proportion was not always dominated in 2006. Alberta province revealed the percentage of international students graduated in 2001 has a larger proportion than it was in 2006, with 6% and 4.3%. However, the three other provinces, Monitoba, Ontario, New Foundland and Labrador showed the lowest proportion of the number of overseas students graduated, at approximately 3% in 2001 and 7% in 2006.

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A comparison of international graduates in percentage terms from universities in 8 regions in Canada in two separate years, 2001 and 2006 is illustrated in the bar chart. New Brunswick broke a record as by far the highest number of international graduates in both years. While the percentage of student graduates in New Brunswick increased in 2006, 2001 experienced a decrease in Alberta.


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Hasbi, I must say that you have analyzed and presented the data properly, however, for future reference I would suggest that you keep a wrap up idea of the overall analysis in the end of the essay rather than having them in the beginning and then again in the end of the essay.

I hope my remarks did help in enhancing your analysis and your essay as a whole and also, mind the words you use when you refer to the time frame, such as the timeline when the graph and the records were taken as well as the words you use to denote such information, otherwise, it's a well written analysis and good luck!