Hi! This is my first time using this and I wish to get some feedback in what I wrote for my Questbridge application. English is not my first language, and I have struggled writing this. The prompt is: Tell us about one of your proudest achievements or moments and what it says about you.
It has a 200 word limit and my answer is EXACTLY 200 words. I have a problem with over writing and this was definitely a challenge. I would likesome feedback if possible.
"Ala de Oro"
It was my freshman year at the new school I transferred to, and I asked myself why it didn't have a newspaper. For a split second, I thought it was actually plausible for me to create one, but then I remembered I was a nobody. I wasn't wrong, it was the middle of the year and I had managed to stay incognito for most of my classmates. Estranged. Inconspicuous. Voiceless. To me, the dream of creating an outlet for students' expressions was how I coped with the fact that my own voice was being disregarded. In the spur of the moment, I proposed the idea to the school board and they accepted it, and even recruited an editorial staff for me. I was given a two-month deadline, and after several sleepless nights, due to my nonexistent knowledge in editing programs, the job was done.
The agglomeration of events, opinions, and memories from 2016 I named "Ala de Oro" became my greatest achievement. Everyone loved it, I became recognized, even popular. The success of the online newspaper reflects my leadership skills, my ability to work under a time constraint, my willingness to learn new things, and my mindfulness towards my peers.