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Relief camp for the earthquake victims



SaudSuhail 2 / 4  
Jan 27, 2014   #1
Section 1: Directed Writing
You are advised to write between 200 and 300 words. Total marks for this part: 30.
Task
Your class is organising a project to help some people in your community. You decide to write an article
for your school magazine to encourage other students to join in this project.
Write your magazine article. You must include the following:
- details of the people you are helping and why you are helping them
- details of the project you are organising
- what other students can do to help.
Cover all three points above in detail. You should make sure your article is informative and persuasive.
Start your article with a suitable headline
.

Imagine the people who have lost their loved ones their homes and have nothing to eat and drink for their survival. Such are the miseries of the victims of the earthquake in Baluchistan. They had been already involved in fighting against poverty; now their misfortune has added another misery of being homeless, without food and losing their families.

Although the Government had undertook efforts of rehabilitation camps for the victims. But due to the lack of infrastructure and the fact that the area is not all developed, all efforts had largely been unsuccessful. It should also be acknowledged that there are hardly any sufficient medical institutions in the area and there is a fear of widespread diseases in the area due to the calamity. Being one of their countrymen, it's our utmost responsibility to respond to their call for help and hence

the 11th Grade batch of HSV school had organized a relief camp for the victim. We would be collecting all sorts of necessary item like clothing and food as well as cash donation. All students are encouraged to take full part by donating as much you can and it should be remembered as said by someone that 'No one become poor by giving.'


indah_hai 19 / 38  
Jan 27, 2014   #2
Dear SaudSuhail,
I think in the first paragraph, you could write more the detail of the people condition in the area. Not only as general condition. It could interact reader to give more helps.
OP SaudSuhail 2 / 4  
Jan 27, 2014   #3
Please support by giving in your sample sentences.


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