Skills and knowledge gained from study by an individual aspiring to become a healthcare professional

What skills and knowledge do you hope to gain from your proposed study programme?

As a dedicated individual aspiring to become a healthcare professional, I am eager to acquire the skills and knowledge to excel in the field of medicine. Therefore, these study programs offer opportunities to pursue my passion for contributing to the well being of others.

First of all, my first choice program is the University of XXXX, studying Bachelor of Medicine and Surgery, because it offers a medical curriculum that emphasises medical education. Through this program, I aim to aspire to a deep understanding in the foundation of basic sciences and clinical skills that will enhance my abilities in physical examination. Also by learning from the admired faculty members and highly skilled healthcare professionals, I aim to acquire the ability to diagnose, treat and prevent illnesses from spreading around the world.

Moreover, although health science is my second choice, the University of XXXX presents numerous opportunities in fostering team work and effective communication among healthcare professionals. Therefore, i aim to gain the knowledge in healthcare training as this will enhance my critical thinking, problem solving and research skills, to enable me to contribute to the advancement of healthcare globally and locally.

These are the skills and knowledge that I aim to aspire from my chosen study programs as they both offer a chance to refine my skills and knowledge in pursuing my passion to become a healthcare professional.

The information you have presented is not specific enough to show that you have deeply considered the program offerings of both universities. The way you have written the skills and knowledge you hope to gain could actually be used for any university in general. It is like a template response that does not really help the reviewer understand the specific reasons you chose these schools. You need to explain specifics, about the program subjects and how these apply to your skills development, and knowledge increase that will result in transference upon your return to your country. Admit to your weaknesses at present and then use that to explain why the program specifics will enhance your skills and knowledge in those aspects.

First of all, my first choice program is the University of ...

You will need to reconstruct this well. You talked about program and then you mentioned university rather.

Try and make the reasons why you want to study at those universities more personal rather than just general reasons. It doesn't make your essay compelling enough.

Also, try replacing the I aim to gain with other phrases. It makes reading quite boring.