Study Plan- COMMONWEALTH SHARED SCHOLARSHIPS - the University of Cambridge

Hello, kindly give insights and corrections on my Master's plan of study for the Commonwealth shared scholarships. Thank you in advance.

Prompt:

In 300 words, provide a detailed plan of your proposed study.

The selection panel will want to understand why you have selected your proposed course and university.

Describe clearly:
-Why you have chosen your proposed course and university and why you want to undertake this study in the UK
-What it is that you are looking for in a course and how your chosen course relates to your objectives
-Any dissertation topic you have in mind

According to QS ranking, the University of Cambridge is ranked third worldwide and is one of the top universities in the United Kingdom (UK) that offers MPhil in Population Health Sciences. The university has top researchers and experts who facilitate the course and offers students the unique opportunity for professional networking. It also offers students with exposure to global best practices. The course enables students to learn how to identify, monitor and assess risks to population health as well as plan, design, implement, and evaluate the impacts of intervention measures on population health. Studying in the UK is also ideal as it is a modern and safe country with many opportunities for scholars to practice their profession.

In the duration of my study, my research will be focused on climate change and health systems. I aim to understand the effects of climate change on health and health systems, the weaknesses of Kenya's health system and how it can be strengthened to become more sustainable and climate-resilient. I also aim to understand how health systems can be adapted to deal with climate change and its impacts on population health. Through this dissertation, I will gain research and analytical skills which will be useful in my quest to deeply understand my country's health needs and proffer solutions to the deficiencies that our health sector faces.

Upon the completion of this course, I intend to work in collaboration with research centres, and government and Non-governmental institutions to help develop a sustainable and climate-resilient health system with enhanced capacities to mitigate, protect and improve population health.

Screeners will not consider the university ranking and researched response to the first question. These sorts of replies indicate that the student has not thoroughly considered the personal and academic goals he has in relation to his university and country choice. The choices were made on a highly superficial basis and therefore, does not indicate the seriousness of the student's application intentions.

The fact that the writer also failed to create responses to other questions shows that the applicant can be disqualified due to a lack of candidate information considerations. There are other unanswered questions that should lead into the dissertation topic. I am afraid this essay will not be helpful to the applicant as a written interview response. Too much information is lacking for the candidate to be taken seriously by the adcom.

@Holt
Thank you for the insights. Corrections were made accordingly.