Can you give me some constructive critisim on my essay. It's suppose to be 300 words and mine is 330.
If I was lucky enough to get excepted to ***** I would preform academically to the best of my ability. I would always keep up to date on assignments and complete projects well before they are due. I would most likely have to get a part time job to help me with my college expenses. While having a part time job would eat into my study time, I would make the best of it and try to make it work. I managed this year to study for my leaving certificate while also having a part time job. If I was an ***** scholarship recipient ( which would be amazing) I would preform outstanding academically. Since I wouldnt have to have a part time job, I would have so much more time to study and I would. Without money worries the only thing I would be worrying about would be my education.
Growing up I was always told of the things I couldn't do, never the things I could. When I was eleven I got very sick. When I was twelve I was told I was going to die soon. Everyday I asked could I leave and everyday I was told no. I got fed up of being told I couldn't, so I told myself I could. I told myself "I could" get better, I told myself "I could " leave the hospital and I told myself "I could" live and I did. When I was fourteen I was deemed perfectly healthy. I had stared death in the ce and I promised myself that I would enjoy an make my life worth living. I would do everything that I had wanted and I have. I went and will complete secondary school just like I wanted and now I am given the opportunity to go study at university just like I have always wanted. I have always wanted to go to university and I am not about to mess it up and I will preform remarkably acedemicaly.
If I was lucky enough to get excepted to ***** I would preform academically to the best of my ability. I would always keep up to date on assignments and complete projects well before they are due. I would most likely have to get a part time job to help me with my college expenses. While having a part time job would eat into my study time, I would make the best of it and try to make it work. I managed this year to study for my leaving certificate while also having a part time job. If I was an ***** scholarship recipient ( which would be amazing) I would preform outstanding academically. Since I wouldnt have to have a part time job, I would have so much more time to study and I would. Without money worries the only thing I would be worrying about would be my education.
Growing up I was always told of the things I couldn't do, never the things I could. When I was eleven I got very sick. When I was twelve I was told I was going to die soon. Everyday I asked could I leave and everyday I was told no. I got fed up of being told I couldn't, so I told myself I could. I told myself "I could" get better, I told myself "I could " leave the hospital and I told myself "I could" live and I did. When I was fourteen I was deemed perfectly healthy. I had stared death in the ce and I promised myself that I would enjoy an make my life worth living. I would do everything that I had wanted and I have. I went and will complete secondary school just like I wanted and now I am given the opportunity to go study at university just like I have always wanted. I have always wanted to go to university and I am not about to mess it up and I will preform remarkably acedemicaly.
