Hello :) I am applying to the Spring-Term Fashion Merchandising Management program at F.I.T
I really want your feedback and correction with my essay. The essay topic is as follows:
What makes you a perfect candidate for F.I.T.? Why are you interested in the major that you are applying to? This is your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities, and accomplishments.
and this is my intro
When I was little, I loved the book Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, I was once like Alice knocking on the door in Wonderland, looking for her white rabbit in a dreamy forest.
However, what captured my eyes more than the story was their clothing. I loved their stunning and dazzling dresses ironically made of chic patterns. Everyone in Wonderland wore breathtakingly beautiful clothes even the white rabbit. I aspired go to into the career of fashion after I realized that fashion is the strongest method that I could become anyone I wanted to be and enter the dreamy forest anytime I wanted. In the book, they had different style of clothing as representing who they are. I found my white rabbit and now it is time to open my door in a dreamy forest into Fashion Institute of Technology for my real dream world.
THANK YOU
I really want your feedback and correction with my essay. The essay topic is as follows:
What makes you a perfect candidate for F.I.T.? Why are you interested in the major that you are applying to? This is your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities, and accomplishments.
and this is my intro
When I was little, I loved the book Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, I was once like Alice knocking on the door in Wonderland, looking for her white rabbit in a dreamy forest.
However, what captured my eyes more than the story was their clothing. I loved their stunning and dazzling dresses ironically made of chic patterns. Everyone in Wonderland wore breathtakingly beautiful clothes even the white rabbit. I aspired go to into the career of fashion after I realized that fashion is the strongest method that I could become anyone I wanted to be and enter the dreamy forest anytime I wanted. In the book, they had different style of clothing as representing who they are. I found my white rabbit and now it is time to open my door in a dreamy forest into Fashion Institute of Technology for my real dream world.
THANK YOU