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Short answer-desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future


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Nov 1, 2009   #1
Question 1. How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to Chicago.

NAME is Common Application ID number _________. I am a number. I am another application in a stack of hundreds. I can only hope and dream that double spaced 12 point font can fully portray the extent of my ambitions and essence of who I am, but only my family members- all 200 of them- know me well beyond an application number. They will tell you that I am the girl who bursts out laughing in dead silence, builds Rubens' Tube for fun, or cries when her dad eats her pet lobster. Thus, I am searching for an extended family within the University of Chicago that can provide me with an academic, supportive and quirky community. The University of Chicago's multitude of student centers and laboratories from the Reynolds Club to the Fermilab encourages me to perceive the campus as a playground for intellectuals.

The University of Chicago's Common Core requires students to build a strong foundation in math, science, humanities, and language- nurturing its students to become a true renaissance man or woman. However, the curriculum also allows for independent endeavors which gives me the opportunity to capitalize on my natural aptitude for math and science by exploring engineering. I will be able to satiate my curiosity for the natural world and to discover all the possibilities that it contains, whether it be developing the next transistor or finding a cure for hiccups. Whether I am a student at University of Chicago or at a local community college, I am still not simply Common Application ID number ________. I am a young woman striving for the extraordinary, living my life without inhibitions hoping to encounter a little thing called happiness.
linmark /  
Nov 1, 2009   #2
Interesting opening which leads naturally to your point about coming from a large (200??) family. What does it mean to come from such a big family? I would have liked to learn more about that aspect of your life.

Your examples are a bit bizarre to me (like the adjective "quirky" u used for the U Chic. community.) Be sure it conveys the impression of you that you intended (are you sure that U Chic likes to be seen as quirky??) Also, not sure the verb usage here (in red) is appropriate. Likewise, be sure that your perception (of all these facilities as a playground for intellectuals) will not be received badly by the Admissions Officer reading your essay.

"The University of Chicago's multitude of student centers and laboratories from the Reynolds Club to the Fermilab encourages me to perceive the campus as a playground for intellectuals."


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