The most appealing fact about Yale is the eclectic community of students

Could anyone help me out?
I wrote this for the topic 'why yale'
The most appealing fact about Yale is the eclectic community of students. Though I haven't been to the school, through the university's website and view book I have realised that Yale provides the best opportunity to meet new people and experience diverse cultures. Nonetheless, after everything, I need a community where I would easily fit in and be exposed to a miscellany of ideas.

Hmmmm. I think you should talk more about you and how you fit into Yale, instead of saying Yale is a good school
Because Im sure Yale wants to know more about you.
And try to make the start more interesting :)- start with a story maybe

You are mentioning things which are common in most college essays...
Try writing about what specific about yale appeals to you... like it is need blind or its research department.
do not be limited to the kind of ambiance it provides..

sorry for being harsh... but i had to just to make your college essay better.