Hello all, I'm new here and am hoping to get some editing on my paper. I am a sophomore applying to Mays Business School at A&M. There are a limited number of spots and this paper determines whether I get in or not. There are no requirements for the paper, but my advisor says I need to include why I'm better than other applicants, what I will do with my degree etc. My advisor also said I should be "businesslike and to the point." I used this website some to help me: unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/business.html
Any and all suggestions will be appreciated!
Dear Appeals Review Board:
I am seeking a transfer into the very prestigious Mays Business School. A business student should be ethical, intelligent and quick to make decisions, but not leave their common sense at the door. During most of my life before coming A&M, I was in the Boy Scouts of America eventually becoming an Eagle Scout. With the skills I have gained during my journey to becoming an Eagle Scout, I will be able to lead my peers and achieve high marks in my classes. When I first started thinking about what I wanted to be when I "grew up," the first thing that popped into my head was marine biologist due to being influenced by my favorite author. Then a few years down the road, I started working as a bagger at HEB Grocery. Soon after I became a cashier and started asking my managers about what they did. The processes and operations I found out my store goes through on a daily basis amazed me and made me realize I wanted to be in that kind of work. With my business degree, I plan to get a job that interacts with many different people on a daily basis (i.e. HEB) and allows me to represent the professional Aggie Spirit.
I realize many people apply for a very limited number of spots in Mays, but I believe that with my leadership skills instilled by Boy Scouts, good grades in my classes and high drive to succeed, I will be an excellent addition to Mays Business School.
Any and all suggestions will be appreciated!
Dear Appeals Review Board:
I am seeking a transfer into the very prestigious Mays Business School. A business student should be ethical, intelligent and quick to make decisions, but not leave their common sense at the door. During most of my life before coming A&M, I was in the Boy Scouts of America eventually becoming an Eagle Scout. With the skills I have gained during my journey to becoming an Eagle Scout, I will be able to lead my peers and achieve high marks in my classes. When I first started thinking about what I wanted to be when I "grew up," the first thing that popped into my head was marine biologist due to being influenced by my favorite author. Then a few years down the road, I started working as a bagger at HEB Grocery. Soon after I became a cashier and started asking my managers about what they did. The processes and operations I found out my store goes through on a daily basis amazed me and made me realize I wanted to be in that kind of work. With my business degree, I plan to get a job that interacts with many different people on a daily basis (i.e. HEB) and allows me to represent the professional Aggie Spirit.
I realize many people apply for a very limited number of spots in Mays, but I believe that with my leadership skills instilled by Boy Scouts, good grades in my classes and high drive to succeed, I will be an excellent addition to Mays Business School.
