being
apart a part of the PALS...
I started talking to my friend, Leo, who was in PALs. I asked him questions about the organization, like what they did and how would they help out other people. With all the information I got about PALs, I was convinced to fill out my application and turn it in. I was glad to hear that I got accepted as a PAL member. ------ These boring sentences have no place in your essay. They make statements that the reader does not need to hear. Only include sentences that carry your reader along toward the main idea you want to convey.
What is the main idea/message of the essay?
I think it is: "An ending in life is just a new beginning, so you can start over again."
So what does that wisdom have to do with the teacher?
Mrs. Dovali has been many things to me... I need some tips about what to write after this.
Explain her influence in a way that celebrates this concept: "An ending in life is just a new beginning, so you can start over again."