Hey guys, I'm working on my supplementary essays for my Barnard application, and I'm wondering if my essay is too flowery. Does it need to be more specific? Here's the prompt:
Pick one woman in history or fiction to converse with for an hour and explain your choice. What would you talk about? (100-250 words)
Although she's only the product of someone's imagination, Leia Organa has always inspired me. She stood as the representative of a planet ruthlessly destroyed by the Empire, built and led the Rebel Alliance and the Resistance, and continually fought for the government she believed in so strongly. If given the chance, I'd ask how she managed to stand tall when she was fighting with the underdogs, when she was dismissed and degraded, or when so many people she loved disappeared. Leia was only nineteen when she led the effort to destroy the Death Star, barely an adult but strong enough to carry the fate of her galaxy.
Leia Organa- princess, politician, and general- was never willing to give up on what she believed in, and strength like her's shouldn't just exist in fiction. So if I, by some miracle that allowed me to skirt the lines between fantasy and reality, was given the chance to speak with Leia Organa for just an hour, I would ask her how she mustered the strength to trudge through it all. And I know what she would tell me, in true Leia fashion: that somebody had to, and if not her, then who? Our world is not so different from her galaxy. There is turmoil all around us, and it seems like our world is too broken to fix. But there's hope, there always is, as long as someone is willing to take opportunity and run with it. And if not me, then who?
Pick one woman in history or fiction to converse with for an hour and explain your choice. What would you talk about? (100-250 words)
Although she's only the product of someone's imagination, Leia Organa has always inspired me. She stood as the representative of a planet ruthlessly destroyed by the Empire, built and led the Rebel Alliance and the Resistance, and continually fought for the government she believed in so strongly. If given the chance, I'd ask how she managed to stand tall when she was fighting with the underdogs, when she was dismissed and degraded, or when so many people she loved disappeared. Leia was only nineteen when she led the effort to destroy the Death Star, barely an adult but strong enough to carry the fate of her galaxy.
Leia Organa- princess, politician, and general- was never willing to give up on what she believed in, and strength like her's shouldn't just exist in fiction. So if I, by some miracle that allowed me to skirt the lines between fantasy and reality, was given the chance to speak with Leia Organa for just an hour, I would ask her how she mustered the strength to trudge through it all. And I know what she would tell me, in true Leia fashion: that somebody had to, and if not her, then who? Our world is not so different from her galaxy. There is turmoil all around us, and it seems like our world is too broken to fix. But there's hope, there always is, as long as someone is willing to take opportunity and run with it. And if not me, then who?