Hello,
can anyone give me any suggestions on this essay? the deadline's Jan 2nd.
I will greatly appreciate your comments/critiques/corrections.
As a child, I loved creating something. I would make a lion with playdough, draw an imaginative wonderland, and write fantasy tales. I also delighted in observing the world. I used to touch a desk and ask myself what caused its hardness and watch boiling soup, wondering why it thickened as it got hotter. I had these creative urge to harvest a new reality, and intellectual curiosity to delve deeper into the nature's phenomena. As I grew up, I found Chemistry the ideal subject to quench both of my desires.
To me, Chemistry is a field which holds much promise. Its study will allow my theoretical ventures into the nature's inner workings and the existence and constitution of matters that I questioned so many times as a child. At the same time, it will provide opportunities to apply my knowledge in practice, enabling the empirical experiences of nature that I so desired to achieve. However most importantly, it will ultimately offer me the opportunities to be an inventor of new materials, molecules, drugs, theories or technologies. I believe that by exploring the specific field of synthetic chemistry, I will be able to utilize my creative spirit and knowledge to bring forth the reality I hope to materialize.
It was perhaps my internship experience that I conclusively decided to become a chemist. Working as a laboratory assistant in a pharmaceutical company for 6 weeks last summer, I participated in generic drug cultivations and was able to witness the practical applications of organic chemical syntheses. Despite the arduous experimental procedure that I underwent, I could not suppress my excitement upon seeing the ingredients for cure emerging into reality. It was then I was determined to become a synthetic chemist, to implement my knowledge and yield my best creation for the betterment of society.
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can anyone give me any suggestions on this essay? the deadline's Jan 2nd.
I will greatly appreciate your comments/critiques/corrections.
As a child, I loved creating something. I would make a lion with playdough, draw an imaginative wonderland, and write fantasy tales. I also delighted in observing the world. I used to touch a desk and ask myself what caused its hardness and watch boiling soup, wondering why it thickened as it got hotter. I had these creative urge to harvest a new reality, and intellectual curiosity to delve deeper into the nature's phenomena. As I grew up, I found Chemistry the ideal subject to quench both of my desires.
To me, Chemistry is a field which holds much promise. Its study will allow my theoretical ventures into the nature's inner workings and the existence and constitution of matters that I questioned so many times as a child. At the same time, it will provide opportunities to apply my knowledge in practice, enabling the empirical experiences of nature that I so desired to achieve. However most importantly, it will ultimately offer me the opportunities to be an inventor of new materials, molecules, drugs, theories or technologies. I believe that by exploring the specific field of synthetic chemistry, I will be able to utilize my creative spirit and knowledge to bring forth the reality I hope to materialize.
It was perhaps my internship experience that I conclusively decided to become a chemist. Working as a laboratory assistant in a pharmaceutical company for 6 weeks last summer, I participated in generic drug cultivations and was able to witness the practical applications of organic chemical syntheses. Despite the arduous experimental procedure that I underwent, I could not suppress my excitement upon seeing the ingredients for cure emerging into reality. It was then I was determined to become a synthetic chemist, to implement my knowledge and yield my best creation for the betterment of society.
(299/300)