Here is the prompt: Please relate your interest in studying at Georgetown University to your goals. How do these thoughts relate to your chosen course of study?
Although I have yet to decide on my major or career, I am certain of my interest in human interaction. I understand that this passion is hard to place into a category, but that is why I feel that Georgetown University is the right school for me to pursue my goals. I have recently enrolled in an online AP Psychology course, of which both the medium and the subject matter a new to me. I knew that this course would be challenging, but I had earlier realized my interest in the human condition, so I decided to take the class. This course has exceeded my expectations and has brought me to realize the great possibilities for applying this passion of mine. Similar to this online course, Georgetown University also provides an opportunity to continue my newly peaked interest. After my visit to both the nation's capital, Washington, D.C., and the Georgetown campus, I realized just how privileged I would be to study at Georgetown University. As I walked around the city, I found something new and stimulating in every direction. Upon touring the campus and learning about the curriculum, I knew that I could pursue my passions at Georgetown University. From the wide variety of career opportunities available to Georgetown students to the multitude of programs, majors, and minors offered, I am certain that I can find my niche at Georgetown University. While the exact applications of my passion in social science vary from psychology to politics, I am confident that studying in a leading international community such as Georgetown's will certainly equip me with the environment and knowledge to achieve my goals. As I have learned in my psychology course, a human is not only shaped by her genes, but also by her environment. To spend four or more years in an environment such as Georgetown University's would undoubtedly provide a positive impact not only on my studies, but also my character. A strong foundation is essential to achieving one's goals, no matter what these goals may entail. I believe that the boundless opportunities provided by the environment and community of Georgetown University will allow me to fully pursue my goals in life.
I knew that this course would be challenging, but I had earlier realized my interest in the human condition, so I decided to take the class. This course has exceeded my expectations and has brought me to realize the great possibilities for applying this passion of mine.
You may want to reword this a little bit: I knew this course would be challenging, but as I had realized my interest in the human condition, I decided to take the challenge.
Also, maybe you want to be clear about your passion here since you did not mention it specifically anywhere before this sentence.
I like the whole idea of the essay, but I think you should try to make it a bit more personable-maybe start off by describing a specific event that made you discover your passion for working with people...and then go on to explain your fascination with psychology. But overall it was really good!
