3. Brown offers programs in Biomedical, Chemical, Civil, Computer, Electrical, Materials, and Mechanical Engineering. Because there is a common core curriculum within Engineering, students need not select a specific area until their junior year. We are curious to know, however, if any particular program within Engineering presently appeals to you. If so, please discuss that choice.
I intend to take up Biomedical engineering. For me, it is the field with the most potential. As a relatively new branch of science, there are many questions that still need to be answered and many mysteries that still await the bold ...
This is well written. However, it would be better if you can specify one single thing you want to do in this field. Read some current articles on the biomedical engineering. That may give you some ideas about how you can be even specific. If you can specifically say that you want to do research/job in XYZ field in the future, your essay would stand out. Of course, your interests may change over the years, but it would be great if you can specify one..
Short and to-the-point. Are you going to write more about this for your "common app" topic?
One small comment: Biomed, like biochem is a popular potential major for many college applicants. For that reason, you might want to consider modifying this phrase:
to go where humanity has never gone before.
as many like yourself are flocking to the field. How about "where humanity is just beginning to discover??"
Good luck!
. How can we cure cancer? How can we regenerate human limbs? How can we create organs?
This is more simplistic than it needs to be. You can look at a few research articles and cite them specifically. Mention a few specific things in place of these general ideas.
Hey, I often recommend a book by Becker that gives an interesting idea about regeneration: The Body Electric.
where cancer is no worse a disease than the common cold--- awesome, this is a good way to say it.
Thank you for all the helpful comments.
I intend to take up Biomedical engineering. For me, it is the field with the most potential. As a relatively new branch of science, there are many questions that still need to be answered and many mysteries that still await the bold explorer. How can we for instance create artificial stem cells to avoid controversy and save lives? Should it be through Induced Pluripotent Cells or ex-vitro cell culture? We don't know, but I yearn to be one of those explorers who are going to find out, to be at the cutting edge of science, to be where humanity is just beginning to go. Above all else, I envision a world where people can live free from sickness, where diabetes is no longer synonymous with suffering, where cancer is no worse a disease than the common cold. It is a beautiful dream that I wish to help turn into reality.