'a bundle of energy' - Common App- Extracurricular

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I have always been a bundle of energy. Never afraid of moving to the beat, I discovered my passion for dancing. At a young age dressing up and putting on show for the neighbors, to performing under the bright lights at my high school homecoming football game. I am head over heels for the rush of adrenaline performing on stage; looking out at my friends and family's beaming faces. I trained countless hours at the studio, school, and at home with the desire of being a member of my high school's national champion competition team. Surprisingly, the best feeling was lying on my bed at the end of the day; muscles aching and utterly exhausted. I knew in that moment I did everything I possibly could and only my love for dance could get me out of bed the next morning. This led me to getting an internship at my dance studio where I am so lucky to get to share my passion with younger dancers. Unfortunately, I never become a member of that team, but I now have a new goal of dancing in college. It definitely hasn't stopped me from pursuing what that little girl fell in love with many years ago.

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I knewIn that moment,I knew that I had done everything I possibly could, and only my love for dance could get me out of bed the next morning.

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