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Who is someone you admire? What do you value in this person?
Of all the people I know, I admire Christine, a friend of my family, the most.
Christine is strong and optimistic. She is a single mother who married twice, having two daughters, whose ages differ by 10 years. Yet her second husband left her when her younger daughter was still in kindergarten. Since her parents lived with her, she had to support a family of five on her own. She must have a hard life without a man to share the responsibility of family with her. Other women would have broken down, being addicted to alcohol or drugs, yet Christine never complained. Despite great hardship, she managed to make a happy family and be both a dutiful daughter and a patient mother. To her, life is always sunny, and she simply accepted difficulties and overcame them, never giving up. In Christine, I saw the power of the strength in heart that can motivate a person to live in an optimistic way and overcome all difficulties.
Christine has her own pursuits. Intending to be a lawyer when she finished college, she entered an office as a clerk due to the social environment and the immature law system in the nation at that time, but she maintained her passion for law and politics. She is concerned about current affairs, just as men do. She reads books on different subjects, especially those on law, trying to catch up with the development of the world. She never put down her dream, yet made her dream come true in another way. I admire her persistence in dreams, and I knew that one does not have to reach a goal in a realistic way, but to satisfy his/her own desire.
Christine is eager to learn. Though born in 1960s, she learnt to use electronic devices such as the computer, while people at her age, or even younger, are not willing to learn these modern skills. What impressed me the most, she did all these just to fulfill her life, but not for job promotion as other people who did these for. Her story told me that one is never too old to learn, and that studying is not a means to gain other goals, but studying itself is a goal.
I admire Christine for her inner-strength, optimism and her willingness to study new things. She proved that women should not be weak and subservient, neither to men nor to life and showed me what an independent modern woman should be like.
Thanks a lot!! :D
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Who is someone you admire? What do you value in this person?
Of all the people I know, I admire Christine, a friend of my family, the most.
Christine is strong and optimistic. She is a single mother who married twice, having two daughters, whose ages differ by 10 years. Yet her second husband left her when her younger daughter was still in kindergarten. Since her parents lived with her, she had to support a family of five on her own. She must have a hard life without a man to share the responsibility of family with her. Other women would have broken down, being addicted to alcohol or drugs, yet Christine never complained. Despite great hardship, she managed to make a happy family and be both a dutiful daughter and a patient mother. To her, life is always sunny, and she simply accepted difficulties and overcame them, never giving up. In Christine, I saw the power of the strength in heart that can motivate a person to live in an optimistic way and overcome all difficulties.
Christine has her own pursuits. Intending to be a lawyer when she finished college, she entered an office as a clerk due to the social environment and the immature law system in the nation at that time, but she maintained her passion for law and politics. She is concerned about current affairs, just as men do. She reads books on different subjects, especially those on law, trying to catch up with the development of the world. She never put down her dream, yet made her dream come true in another way. I admire her persistence in dreams, and I knew that one does not have to reach a goal in a realistic way, but to satisfy his/her own desire.
Christine is eager to learn. Though born in 1960s, she learnt to use electronic devices such as the computer, while people at her age, or even younger, are not willing to learn these modern skills. What impressed me the most, she did all these just to fulfill her life, but not for job promotion as other people who did these for. Her story told me that one is never too old to learn, and that studying is not a means to gain other goals, but studying itself is a goal.
I admire Christine for her inner-strength, optimism and her willingness to study new things. She proved that women should not be weak and subservient, neither to men nor to life and showed me what an independent modern woman should be like.
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