Please help me with my CMU prompt
Feel free to be brutally honest. Does my essay answer the prompt?
Please submit a one-page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon and your particular major(s), department(s) or program(s). This essay should include the reasons why you've chosen the major(s), any goals or relevant work plans and any other information you would like us to know. If you are applying to more than one college or program, please mention each college or program you are applying to. Because our admission committees review applicants by college and programs, your essay can impact our final decision. Please do not exceed one page for this essay.
Ever since I was young, my mother always read The Economic Digest-the Chinese version of The Economist. I was perplexed about the enigmatic numbers and graphs. I always wondered how my mom actually found this interesting. I mean, isn't it just like another math course?
By the end of our junior year in high school, we had to pick our senior year course selections. Seeing "economics" on the list, I signed up for it. I knew it was time to decode my mother's fascination.
A few months later when I finally had my first economics class, my teacher, Mr. Ong, passed out papers and asked us all to write down our own definition of "economics". I wrote down something like "the distribution of money between businesses...has to do with stock markets". I thought I would probably have the best answer, I mean, I have been watching my mother read about economics all my life! But when Mr. Ong read my answer, he shook his head and said "it's so much more than just that. It's a study of choices". What? I thought. How can it be? I've been making choices all my life, yet I don't know anything about economics!
From then on, even through difficulties of the course, I am absolutely captivated by economics. It explains everything in the market that I wasn't able to answer before. I remember asking my mother why retail stores hold sales since they'd lose money. She explained that instead of losing money, they would earn more than they would have otherwise. But no matter how well she clarified it, I still remained baffled. But after learning some economics, although I'm still confused and unknowledgeable in some aspects of the economy, I can finally understand how some markets work.
Wanting to further my knowledge in my new interest, I did some research on colleges and found Carnegie Mellon University. I was blown away when I found out about the Nobel Laureates in the faculty. What an honor would it be to be taught by such esteemed professors! And along with so many research opportunities and assistantships available, I know I'd be fully prepared to work in the real world to make a difference in society after such an education.
Particularly, I am attracted to the Green Design Institute. I always had passion to help our environment, yet I know contributing through a high school club wasn't enough since it does have its limits. I hope that in the future, I'll be able to play a more active role in helping the environment through this program.
What fascinates me most about the undergraduate economics in Carnegie Mellon University is that it is offered in both Tepper School of Business and College of Humanities and Social Sciences-meaning students are open to a variety of benefits. Unlike some colleges, Carnegie Mellon University would not hinder my education in French even if I choose to major in economics and business. To me, this advantage of the joint colleges is tremendous. It means that my choices of student organizations and study abroad programs are further expanded.
That is why I see Carnegie Mellon University, a university full of infinite opportunities in the future, as the right school for me. After my education in this school, instead of being the person who's always posing questions, I will be able to answer my own questions. Perhaps I can even be the person with the answers.
Feel free to be brutally honest. Does my essay answer the prompt?
Please submit a one-page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon and your particular major(s), department(s) or program(s). This essay should include the reasons why you've chosen the major(s), any goals or relevant work plans and any other information you would like us to know. If you are applying to more than one college or program, please mention each college or program you are applying to. Because our admission committees review applicants by college and programs, your essay can impact our final decision. Please do not exceed one page for this essay.
Ever since I was young, my mother always read The Economic Digest-the Chinese version of The Economist. I was perplexed about the enigmatic numbers and graphs. I always wondered how my mom actually found this interesting. I mean, isn't it just like another math course?
By the end of our junior year in high school, we had to pick our senior year course selections. Seeing "economics" on the list, I signed up for it. I knew it was time to decode my mother's fascination.
A few months later when I finally had my first economics class, my teacher, Mr. Ong, passed out papers and asked us all to write down our own definition of "economics". I wrote down something like "the distribution of money between businesses...has to do with stock markets". I thought I would probably have the best answer, I mean, I have been watching my mother read about economics all my life! But when Mr. Ong read my answer, he shook his head and said "it's so much more than just that. It's a study of choices". What? I thought. How can it be? I've been making choices all my life, yet I don't know anything about economics!
From then on, even through difficulties of the course, I am absolutely captivated by economics. It explains everything in the market that I wasn't able to answer before. I remember asking my mother why retail stores hold sales since they'd lose money. She explained that instead of losing money, they would earn more than they would have otherwise. But no matter how well she clarified it, I still remained baffled. But after learning some economics, although I'm still confused and unknowledgeable in some aspects of the economy, I can finally understand how some markets work.
Wanting to further my knowledge in my new interest, I did some research on colleges and found Carnegie Mellon University. I was blown away when I found out about the Nobel Laureates in the faculty. What an honor would it be to be taught by such esteemed professors! And along with so many research opportunities and assistantships available, I know I'd be fully prepared to work in the real world to make a difference in society after such an education.
Particularly, I am attracted to the Green Design Institute. I always had passion to help our environment, yet I know contributing through a high school club wasn't enough since it does have its limits. I hope that in the future, I'll be able to play a more active role in helping the environment through this program.
What fascinates me most about the undergraduate economics in Carnegie Mellon University is that it is offered in both Tepper School of Business and College of Humanities and Social Sciences-meaning students are open to a variety of benefits. Unlike some colleges, Carnegie Mellon University would not hinder my education in French even if I choose to major in economics and business. To me, this advantage of the joint colleges is tremendous. It means that my choices of student organizations and study abroad programs are further expanded.
That is why I see Carnegie Mellon University, a university full of infinite opportunities in the future, as the right school for me. After my education in this school, instead of being the person who's always posing questions, I will be able to answer my own questions. Perhaps I can even be the person with the answers.