Why Columbia (Located in New York, the hub of diversity)

alicimoo 3 / 19

Dec 25, 2008 #1

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why:

Located in New York, the hub of diversity, Columbia possesses one of the most diverse student bodies and award-winning faculties. As stated in its mission statement, Columbia is a school that greatly emphasizes "research and teaching on global issues" and offers a variety of traveling abroad programs to "create academic relationships with many countries and regions." As an aspiring doctor without borders and a student who is greatly interested in international issues, Columbia is perfect for me.

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Located in New York, the hub of diversity, Columbia possesses one of the most diverse student bodies and award-winning faculties. As an aspiring doctor without borders and a student greatly interested in international issues, Columbia's emphasis on global issues and various study abroad programs to connect with other countries greatly interests me.

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I'm not sure if everything flows well, especially my opening sentence?

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks! :)

gmailblows31 6 / 21

Dec 25, 2008 #2

I like the first one more, except for the last line. It's kind of corny. lol.

OP alicimoo 3 / 19

Dec 25, 2008 #3

lol, yea I know. I'm still trying to find another way to end it so it doesn't sound completely cheesy and stupid. Thanks for the feedback. :)

Columbia has everything that I am looking for in a school? =/

gmailblows31 6 / 21

Dec 25, 2008 #4

A bit better. Im not going to lie, I have the same cheesy line for GW, but you really should try to stand out. I couldnt think of anything so im no help :)