I really want to get into Rochester university. Can anybody help me revise these essays?
Commonapp essay:
It was the second trimester of AP Calculus when I got to chapter 5-the "Integrals" section. I love those graphs at first sight of seeing them; this topic was very appealing to me. The graph requires us to find the area of the triangle under the line; the challenge is to use integrals (area of rectangle) to find the area. First, I divided the base into several intervals by adding each rectangle to estimate the area of the triangle. However, there are always errors in there, because the area of the rectangles would be either bigger or smaller than the actual area. The only way I get the actual area is when I divide the base into infinite intervals; I found that the areas of the rectangles equal the area of the triangle! I was fascinated by the fact that the area of the rectangles would eventually turn into the area of the triangle. I was so curious that I divided the base into several intervals. I figured out that the more intervals I drew, the closer the area came to that of the triangle. I was also intrigued about another aspect of it: Starting from the left, right or the middle I got different results of the areas of the rectangles. They might be bigger, smaller or equal to the area of the triangle. However, when the base is divided into infinite intervals, the area becomes the same, which is the area of the triangle.
It is a common faith that people are born differently and not equal. Some are born into wealthy families and physically healthy; they have quite a lot of ways to access success. Some are born into the middle class. Some are born into poor families or are physically disabled; they hardly have access to the high levels of society. Just like with the area of the graph, if I only divided the base into two intervals, the difference between the triangle and the rectangle is huge; so is the elite class that possesses a lot of advantages over those who are not born into wealth. Looking from another perspective, by dividing people's lives into infinite intervals: every year, every day or even every second, then each moment doesn't differ from each other too much. Even poor people experience happiness a lot while the wealthy people might get stuck in their problems once in a while. As long as we see human life from this perspective, then we'll see that life isn't unfair. Even though the rectangle which means the trace of everybody's life is different, however, the area, the integral of people, starting from the origin till the end of the line, is a piece of a story of everybody's life, is always the same. Everybody is created equally; born as a new baby, die as an old man, we create our own story, and they decorate the entire human history.
Rochester supplement:
Why Rochester?
Why Rochester:
Just stop regulating and labeling me.
Everyday I am surrounded by words like: "You have to practice do this." Pushing me to finish my responsibility out of my innate impulse; or words labeling me like "you are a math student, you should do go in math."
We are living in a world to be expected instead of doing what we wishes, under a regulations to schedule our life in a certain way. We are regulated.
I came to know Rochester so well because one of my best friends---Austin Slosberg went to that school. He told me about the self-made schedule, perfect math and science research environment, diversified student body, and Sibley Music Library. Everything just sounded too perfect for me. In Rochester, I am able to make my own schedule without being regulated. I am going to be myself, Jeff, without being labeled.
Commonapp essay:
It was the second trimester of AP Calculus when I got to chapter 5-the "Integrals" section. I love those graphs at first sight of seeing them; this topic was very appealing to me. The graph requires us to find the area of the triangle under the line; the challenge is to use integrals (area of rectangle) to find the area. First, I divided the base into several intervals by adding each rectangle to estimate the area of the triangle. However, there are always errors in there, because the area of the rectangles would be either bigger or smaller than the actual area. The only way I get the actual area is when I divide the base into infinite intervals; I found that the areas of the rectangles equal the area of the triangle! I was fascinated by the fact that the area of the rectangles would eventually turn into the area of the triangle. I was so curious that I divided the base into several intervals. I figured out that the more intervals I drew, the closer the area came to that of the triangle. I was also intrigued about another aspect of it: Starting from the left, right or the middle I got different results of the areas of the rectangles. They might be bigger, smaller or equal to the area of the triangle. However, when the base is divided into infinite intervals, the area becomes the same, which is the area of the triangle.
It is a common faith that people are born differently and not equal. Some are born into wealthy families and physically healthy; they have quite a lot of ways to access success. Some are born into the middle class. Some are born into poor families or are physically disabled; they hardly have access to the high levels of society. Just like with the area of the graph, if I only divided the base into two intervals, the difference between the triangle and the rectangle is huge; so is the elite class that possesses a lot of advantages over those who are not born into wealth. Looking from another perspective, by dividing people's lives into infinite intervals: every year, every day or even every second, then each moment doesn't differ from each other too much. Even poor people experience happiness a lot while the wealthy people might get stuck in their problems once in a while. As long as we see human life from this perspective, then we'll see that life isn't unfair. Even though the rectangle which means the trace of everybody's life is different, however, the area, the integral of people, starting from the origin till the end of the line, is a piece of a story of everybody's life, is always the same. Everybody is created equally; born as a new baby, die as an old man, we create our own story, and they decorate the entire human history.
Rochester supplement:
Why Rochester?
Why Rochester:
Just stop regulating and labeling me.
Everyday I am surrounded by words like: "You have to practice do this." Pushing me to finish my responsibility out of my innate impulse; or words labeling me like "you are a math student, you should do go in math."
We are living in a world to be expected instead of doing what we wishes, under a regulations to schedule our life in a certain way. We are regulated.
I came to know Rochester so well because one of my best friends---Austin Slosberg went to that school. He told me about the self-made schedule, perfect math and science research environment, diversified student body, and Sibley Music Library. Everything just sounded too perfect for me. In Rochester, I am able to make my own schedule without being regulated. I am going to be myself, Jeff, without being labeled.