Hi there, please can you review my essay and tell me what you think (be honest). Looking at others examples my essay seems quite factual in comparison? The deadline is tomorrow. Any comments would be much appreciated! For the record I live on a tiny island of the north coast of Scotland (as mentioned briefly in the essay).
Unlike any other institution, Emory College perfectly accommodates my specific interrelated ambitions; offering unparalleled facilities in anthropology (my intended field of study), a vast range of international study programs and tremendous volunteering opportunities. At Emory, I intend to enthusiastically impel my established interests whilst discovering new unknown curiosities.
The deep roots of my interest in the science of humanity are embedded within my unique local heritage; my home (the Orkney Isles, Scotland) is the richest Neolithic location in Northern Europe. Emory's Department of Anthropology would provide a platform to nurture my keen interest in human and cultural origins. My enthusiasm for anthropology coincides with my passion for travel and adventure. The extensive array of global study opportunities, available to Emory students through CIPA, would allow me to achieve my affiliated goals of cultural discovery and international travel.
In association with the British Red Cross and Voluntary Action Orkney, I have been heavily involved in volunteering for many years. I am extremely intrigued by Emory's engaged learning courses (specifically in sociology and anthropology) which teach the theoretical foundations required to work successfully in community service, whilst centrally concerning my specific academic interests.
By assisting class teachers and providing peer support for other students in a voluntary program at Stromness Academy, I have found that helping others learn is very rewarding. Emory's service learning program SHINE would allow me to receive a similar sense of achievement by helping refugees and immigrants improve themselves.
Coming from a remarkably unique background, I firmly believe that I would harmonize along with the diverse student body -honored to contribute to Emory's global identity.
Unlike any other institution, Emory College perfectly accommodates my specific interrelated ambitions; offering unparalleled facilities in anthropology (my intended field of study), a vast range of international study programs and tremendous volunteering opportunities. At Emory, I intend to enthusiastically impel my established interests whilst discovering new unknown curiosities.
The deep roots of my interest in the science of humanity are embedded within my unique local heritage; my home (the Orkney Isles, Scotland) is the richest Neolithic location in Northern Europe. Emory's Department of Anthropology would provide a platform to nurture my keen interest in human and cultural origins. My enthusiasm for anthropology coincides with my passion for travel and adventure. The extensive array of global study opportunities, available to Emory students through CIPA, would allow me to achieve my affiliated goals of cultural discovery and international travel.
In association with the British Red Cross and Voluntary Action Orkney, I have been heavily involved in volunteering for many years. I am extremely intrigued by Emory's engaged learning courses (specifically in sociology and anthropology) which teach the theoretical foundations required to work successfully in community service, whilst centrally concerning my specific academic interests.
By assisting class teachers and providing peer support for other students in a voluntary program at Stromness Academy, I have found that helping others learn is very rewarding. Emory's service learning program SHINE would allow me to receive a similar sense of achievement by helping refugees and immigrants improve themselves.
Coming from a remarkably unique background, I firmly believe that I would harmonize along with the diverse student body -honored to contribute to Emory's global identity.