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'Curiosity' - Princeton Topic of Choice



nicolehardy87 2 / 9  
Dec 19, 2011   #1
I do not believe in "narrowing my focus." My curiosity simply does not allow it. My curiosity is the type of curiosity that constantly overpowers my discretion with a certain scary consistency. It gives me insight into what I could know and relief from the perpetual school derived fear of what I should know. It breaks open paths for me to travel. It unfurls paths that are blackened and blanketed in thorns, paths that have dim roads, empty and gray. It exposes paths that are neither here nor there. It divulges paths that are brilliant with flowers blossoming, butterflies blooming from gilded cocoons, trees and bushes pregnant with the fruits of their winter labor. It reveals paths that have no end and paths that are infinitely small. My curiosity gives me infinite directions to take. Due to this, I am bequeathed a certain yet unfathomable infinite potential and a responsibility to direct my focus but never to narrow it.

I would like to be a rollercoaster engineer, a pathologist, a paleontologist, a cosmologist, an anthropologist, a writer, a poet, a ballet dancer, a mathemagician (an excellent mathematician), a teacher, a Trader Joe's store employee, an inventor, a cardboard box designer, a physicist, an archaeologist, a literary critic, a cobbler, an aeronautical engineer, and a doll maker. I want to be someone close to the community, someone who can help people, someone people feel comfortable talking to, someone whose door is always open, someone whose only weakness is her unceasing love for people. I want to be someone worth becoming, someone worth the trials of being, the pains of failure, the hurt of falling, and the heartbreak of my mortality, to enjoy the product of my labors, the sweet fruits of my success as primarily a human being and secondarily as a woman.

It is possible for me to be all these things even in small ways. I am no less an aeronautical engineer when designing paper planes in calculus or when building helicopters for the army. I am no less of a Mother Teresa when giving a homeless man my lunch or when mortgaging my home to open a food bank. I am no less brilliant teaching fifth graders physical science than teaching particle physics at MIT. The principles and their applications are the same regardless. The scale of the motion is irrelevant to the motion itself because all motion is a procession, a procession that will render an equal but opposite reaction every time. Each action reaction pair is an inception of motion that is brilliant beyond comparison. An attempt to compare futile because there is no quantitative measure for the level of beauty or potency of an action.

Walt Whitman in "I Sing the Body Electric" said, "All is a procession, the universe is a procession with measured and beautiful motion." I am composed of matter from the universe: the universe is inside of me. Therefore, I have the "moved beautiful motion" of the universe inside of me. I am a brilliant scarlet streak painted on a crisp canvas of a sunset sky. I am that pensive silver that protrudes through that. I am a royal blue that awakens our sensibilities. The universe is composed of me just as I of it. The universe composes and is composed of everything and anything.

I am bound by the same principles the universe is. I am as boundless as the universe, and there lies the inception of my potential. I am situated on a precipice in the universe harnessing my energy, waiting for my implosion, waiting for my potentiality to become kinetic. Waiting for my big bang and for the universe to be born inside of me so I can become as unbounded as the galaxies and worlds that surrounding me. I can be everything, anything, just as the universe can. I just need a place, a school, a college, a mountain, a burning bush, a library, a mosque, a temple, a shrine, a monastery, everything, anything to give me the resources to help direct my curiosity. Everything, anything to teach me how to accept responsibility for my inherent infinite potential.

idk 2 / 3  
Dec 19, 2011   #2
I personally think you should not list so many professions like this: "a rollercoaster engineer, a pathologist, a paleontologist, a cosmologist, an anthropologist, a writer, a poet, a ballet dancer, a mathemagician (an excellent mathematician), a teacher, a Trader Joe's store employee, an inventor, a cardboard box designer, a physicist, an archaeologist, a literary critic, a cobbler, an aeronautical engineer, and a doll maker." Maybe I am not very sharp, but I really do not see the connection (and the point) of this list. You should consider reducing the list. So basically your essay is about what you like to do/be and your curiosity? Again, I do not see the connection throughout your essay.
OP nicolehardy87 2 / 9  
Dec 20, 2011   #3
My essay is about how my curiosity gives me infinite potential to be, do, or become anything and everything.
EF_Susan - / 2310  
Dec 21, 2011   #4
My curiosity is the type of curiosity that constantly overpowers my discretion, with a certain scary consistency.

It gives me insight into what I could know, and relief from the perpetual school derived fear of what I should know.

It divulges paths that are brilliant with flowers blossoming, butterflies blooming-? from gilded cocoons, trees and bushes pregnant with the fruits of their winter labor.

...paths that are infinitely small. My curiosity gives me infinite directions to take. Due to this, I am bequeathed a certain yet unfathomable infinite potential ---You used the word 'infinite' 3 times in this short space. I think you should change one or two to different words so it doesn't sound too repetitive.

Each action reaction pair is an inception of motion that is brilliant beyond comparison. An attempt to compare futile because there is no quantitative measure for the level of beauty or potency of an action.---This whole paragraph is beautifully written!

Therefore, I have the "moved--(?) beautiful motion" of the universe inside of me.

Well I hope that among all the other things you do,
writing stays with you. You are such an excellent writer! I had to read the essay twice, just because of how beautiful it was. Good luck with school.

:)
trgcook 2 / 6  
Dec 21, 2011   #5
this is beautiful. I really do not believe this needs anymore work besides the typos listed above. I can sense you just from the first paragraph. The randomness of the subjects talked about created this coherent flow to your essay that seems particular and unique to you. If you don't get in based on this essay than Princeton is inept I'm sorry to say. However I strongly believe this essay will be viewed as particularly remarkable.
OP nicolehardy87 2 / 9  
Dec 21, 2011   #6
D'awww! Thanks guys! I feel really worried about submitting this. I was deferred from Harvard so I'm kind of worried that I will get deferred or rejected again. Thank you for the support. :) I don't have words to describe how much it means to me. :)


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