'curious as to why people do certain things and act certain ways' - NYU

Regardless of whether or not you have an intended major or concentration, please elaborate on an academic area of interest and how you wish to explore it at NYU's campuses in New York or Abu Dhabi or at one of our global academic centers around the world. Please share any activities or experiences you have had that have cultivated your intellectual interests leading you to choose to study at the NYU campus of your choice.

While growing up and especially now in my life I have always been curious as to why people do certain things and act certain ways. Human behavior has always been an interesting topic that I love to observe and discover new things. To be able to pursue an education and career answering various questions that I have had and observing the human mind is ideal for me. I find New York University to be the best place for me to apply my love for psychology into the various classes that are available. This year for an English project we had topics and characters to choose for the novel we recently completed and we would give a presentation. When I saw the psychoanalytic theory was available I was ecstatic to have the opportunity to study and teach the class on something I find to be immensely interesting to me. Completing this project did not seems as if it was homework, I took joy in doing the research and analyzing the various characters in the book. The only trouble that I had was limiting all that I had learned into one worksheet to share with the class. Completing this project further helped me realize that this is what I want to do since I enjoy it so much. I am excited to begin studying in such an intriguing field, and what other place to do that the best, New York University where I am able experience research projects and many opportunities to study in the abundance of fields that are offered.

Hello,

NYU is one of the most applied to undergraduate schools in the nation. Psychology is by far it's largest non-business/arts major. This means that your competition will be tremendous. Your essay here starts out well, but quickly declines. You mention that NYU is the best place for you to study but do not mention anything to support your assumption. How does NYU fit in with your experiences? More importantly, how do you fit in with NYU. In my experience as an admissions officer for a major university, the single reason why applicants were denied admissions after passing the first round was that they failed to answer the prompt correctly. This essay wants to know "Why NYU." Nothing you have mentioned in your essay lets the reader know why. -AAO/express

Hope This Helps

Ruthy

I have always been curious as to why(not sure about this still) people do certain things and act certain ways. Human behaviour is a very interesting topic, especially because I love to observe and discover new things. To be able to answer these questions while observing the human mind would be ideal for me. New York University is the best place for me to apply my love for psychology with the classes available. I was given an English project about a novel from which we were supposed to choose a topic and character to do a presentation on. When I saw that the psychoanalytic theory was available I was ecstatic to study and teach the class something which I found immensely interesting. Conducting the research and analyzing the various characters did not seem like homework, instead it was a joyous task. My only problem was limiting what I have learned to a single worksheet in order to share with the class. I enjoyed this project so much, that I knew psychology was what I ultimately wanted to do, and what other place to study such an intriguing field but at New York University where I will be able to experience research projects and many opportunities to study.

Maybe you should incorporate more aspects of NYU in your essay. Not really sure what you were saying in the last sentence. Its also a bit generic.

Hope this helps!

hey,

i think that overall the content of your essay is pretty good, but i feel like you should try and transition from why you want to major in psych and the activity that "cultivated your intellectual interests" a bit better. It seems kind of choppy. Also, elaborate a little more on just how great NYU's psych program is. You skim the surface, so if you go a little deeper then your response should be great!

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First of all, what is the word limit on this?

Secondly, You might want some specific examples to show why you enjoy psychology. The prompt asks for "experiences you have had that have cultivated your intellectual interests."

The example you provided demonstrates your intellectual interests, but it doesn't show how they developed. Why did you find so much joy in the project? Why was it so immensely interesting to you?

Thirdly, make sure to read the final draft aloud to yourself to catch any grammar mistakes that you might have.
"Completing this project did not seems as if it was homework" > "The project did not seem like homework"

Fourthly, Don't use rhetorical questions unless you really have to.
"and what other place to do that the best"

Fifthly, don't be wordy. Judging from the size of your essay, the word limit is very constricting, so you don't want to waste any space with unnecessary words.

"While growing up and especially now in my life..." > this has the same meaning as "My whole life."

This year for an English project we had topics and characters to choose for the novel we recently completed and we would give a presentation.

I would fix that sentence, it sounds kind of awkward without any punctuation.

This year for an English project, we had to choose topics and characters, from the novel we recently read, to present.

hello, I think the part about NYU is a little vague. You should definitely look to explain with detail.

Condense and combine the first two sentences. Your English project does not seem to connect with you wanting to study psychology. I agree with admission2012. How will NYU help you pursue your dreams? Why is that school important?

To be able to pursue an education and career answering various questions that I have had and observing the human mind is ideal for me.

Feels a little weird