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Dance Conservatory is my accomplishment - UC promt #2



dncrdv23 3 / 7  
Nov 28, 2010   #1
Out of all the accomplishments that I have experienced in my life, being a four-year member of my high school's Dance Company/Conservatory Program is the one I am most proud of. While I began dancing competitively with a studio at the age of six, my participation with the Conservatory, the most advanced group within the Company, provided me with many challenging growth opportunities that I had not previously experienced through dance. Not only did the Conservatory program enhance my dance skills, it also exposed me to a much broader world of dance. Through this program I have received information about dance education, which included the history of dance and it's influential figures, exposure to the various styles of dance and an analysis of the impact dance has had on society. I also studied and participated in the entire aspects of producing a dance concert, including choreography, lighting and set design, costume design, sound and performance. My time with the Conservatory has expanded my view of dance from an entertainment-based activity to an expressive art form and ultimately to my chosen career path.

My experience with dance has helped influence my personal development by giving me an outlet for my competitiveness, making me a more committed individual, and providing me with an opportunity to develop my leadership skills. By competitiveness, I mean the desire to achieve the highest possible personal results, without comparing myself to anyone else. This is especially important when interacting with fellow dancers and friends. For me, commitment means sticking with the plan and completing all the challenging tasks that may come with it, especially at those times when I would like to take the easy way out. Experience has proven that this is the only way get the results I want in dance and in the rest of my life. And finally true leadership, not only requires a strong personality, but the ability to influence others towards the desired results. As a leader in the Conservatory program, I must regularly strike this balance. I have learned that my best form of leadership is by example. I sincerely believe all three of these attributes will benefit me in my college and future career in dance.

The Dance Conservatory has truly increased my love and appreciation for dance. It also provided me with a wonderful life experience. I now have a much better insight to the world of dance and a deeper understanding of myself. I feel very accomplished for having been part of (HS NAME) Dance Conservatory for the past four years.

danceralltheway 1 / 6  
Nov 28, 2010   #2
Hello Arianna,
I was drawn to your essay because I am a fellow dancer. Your essay is well written. After reading your essay it is evident to me your love and passion for the art form. The only problem I saw in your essay was the first two sentences to your second paragraph. I kind of understood of what you were trying to convey. However, fluidity lacked. With that said here is how I would make it better.

My experiences with dance have helped influence my personal development by allowing me to be a competitive and committed individual. Being a competitive dancer has given me the opportunity to achieve the highest possible results while not comparing myself to others.

I hope this helps!

:)
OP dncrdv23 3 / 7  
Nov 28, 2010   #3
Kendall,

Thank you so much :) I will take that into consideration!

By the way, you go to DP don't you? Once I saw your name I knew exactly who you were. I went to DP when Dani and Hayley came yet I left junior year due to the intensity of school program.
danceralltheway 1 / 6  
Nov 28, 2010   #4
Oh yes I remember you Arianna!! Sorry, I forgot your last name.

But ya good essay overall. I actually wrote my other uc essay on dance as well.

Is there any way you could critique my essay...uc prompt.???
OP dncrdv23 3 / 7  
Nov 28, 2010   #5
No worries at all :) Most people don't know my last name!

Thank you very much. Oh you did? I figured most dancers would. hahah

Yes I would! I am actually not the best essay writer, but I would be happy to help!
danceralltheway 1 / 6  
Nov 28, 2010   #6
its ok girl, at this point i am just desperate for any advice on my essay..cus i just rewrote it.
OP dncrdv23 3 / 7  
Nov 28, 2010   #7
It may take me a while because I still have to finish my first essay, but I will give you as much advice as I can offer. And don't worry I bet it is just fine :)


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