Design POSTERS; MIT - PLEASURE Activity

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

Starting with only a blank paper, adding some layers, combining some colors, and a bit of text, I was astounded when I got a beautiful picture, I felt like a magician. Since 10th grade when I did my first poster, designing has been a part of my life. It rejoices me every time I feel nervous, or i am in a state of depression. It fascinates me how I can escape this world and enter a world of fantasy and imagination. Designing not only gives me joy, it also offers me the opportunity to express my emotions, my thoughts, and my ideas.

What do you guys think?

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 words or fewer)

Back when I was a kid, I used to be amazed every time I saw a car on the streets, or I saw an airplane fly on the sky. I always wondered how cars could run, or how airplanes could fly. I even tried answering these questions on my own by modelling different types of vehicles.

Later in high school in 10th grade when I first studied mechanism, I was fascinated by how mechanics work. Since then my desire to know more has increase exponentially. There the major that appeals to me the most is Mechanical Engineering.

Therefore*

For a second there, I thought you were going to recite one of the intros to the Twilight Zone. Anyway, I like the first one a lot. You do a good job of showing instead of telling and it sounds very genuine, which is great. That looks ready to me.

Now, where the second one is concerned, the idea is sound and for the most part, the execution is too. Normally, I would say that you could add some more of yourself in it, but the 100 word limit really makes that impossible. So good job. However, there are a couple of errors.

Back when I was a kid, I used to be amazed every time I saw a car on the streets, or when/whenever I saw an airplane fly on the sky. I always wondered how cars could run, or how airplanes could fly. I even tried answering these questions on my own by modelling different types of vehicles.

Later,in high school in 10th grade, when I first studied mechanism, I was fascinated by how mechanics work. Since then, my desire to know more has increase exponentially. ThereAfter researching my options, the major that appeals to me the most is Mechanical Engineering. (That last one is suggestion.)

I hope I was helpful.

SilverKnight
Thanks a lot , it was very helpful.

First , I have an admin request for you. You should not have many essays in one thread, open a new thread each time you have a new essay. That is the forum rule and it also helps you earn more feed backs too. A few things I noticed;

, or i amI am in a state of depression.


I saw an airplane flying in the sky


This sounds repetitive.
I always wondered how these things worked.