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DIETETICS Field; UBC COMMON APP - Achieve life and/or career goals?


xxalixx 3 / 2  
Nov 4, 2007   #1
i have a statement to finish this week, it's about how attending ubc will help you acheive your life or career goals. I have no idea how to start this statement, it would be great if anyone could help!!
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Nov 5, 2007   #2
Greetings!

I'd be happy to try to help! First of all, it would be helpful if you are at least somewhat clear on what your life and/or career goals are! If you know what major you are planning on pursuing, you may also have some idea what you'd like your career to look like once you graduate. The focus of the statement will really be more on what those goals are than about "how" attending the university will help you achieve them. Just by virtue of the fact that you will get your degree there, that is the "how" of it. So talk about what you'd like to do with your life, what major in college will get you to that career, and then mention what programs the school has that hold particular interest for you in pursuing those goals.

I hope this helps!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com
OP xxalixx 3 / 2  
Nov 6, 2007   #3
hi sarah,

what you've said really helped me to think of some of the things that i could talk about in the statement. could i ask you to edit it once i finished with it?
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Nov 6, 2007   #4
Absolutely! I'll look forward to reading it! :-)

Sarah, EssayForum.com
OP xxalixx 3 / 2  
Nov 7, 2007   #5
Here it is, its 300 words maximum.
My career goals are to take part in the dietetics field and be able to provide solutions to different people with different health concerns. Therefore, there are many fundamental skills that I need to know in order to become a dietetic. UBC allows me to pursue this goal with the bachelor degree of dietetics. By taking the appropriate courses at UBC and talking to experienced counsellor help me attain my goals by giving me the experience I need for my dream career. Planning out a journey to become a dietetic in the future is not easy without any help or experience.

At UBC, students who want to pursue their dream to become dietetics need to take many science courses and food, nutrient ant health courses. These courses can provide me with knowledge about the human body, nutritional values, food safety, vitamins and minerals and government regulations on different food products. There are also courses which allow me to gain experience of how is it to be a dietetic. Besides the required courses for a dietetic major, there are many helpful people in UBC. These helpful people are experienced counsellors who are willing to talk to students and allow students to clearly understand themselves and gain more confident. If I have any concerns or uncertainty about anything I can go talk to these counsellors to get help. Many times, counsellors provide students with information that youl need to know. There are many helpful resources at UBC that guide me through to attain my career goals.

There are many helpful resources in UBC to get students to be prepared for the job that they want. I willing to work hard and pursue my dream.

thanks!!
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Nov 8, 2007   #6
Greetings!

I think you're off to a good start! Here are some editing suggestions:

By taking the appropriate courses at UBC and talking to experienced counselors, this will help me attain my goals by giving me the experience I need for my dream career. - If you are using British English, then I think two L's in counsellor is OK. In American English, it's one.

Planning out a journey to become a dietetic in the future is not easy without any help or experience. - I think I'd eliminate this sentence; it seems like something that goes without saying.

nutrient and health courses.

There are also courses which allow me to gain experience of how is it to be a dietetic. - Better would be "which provide insight into the career of a dietitian." I'm pretty sure that the word you want is "dietitian" and not "diatetic."

These helpful people are experienced counsellors who are willing to talk to students and allow students to clearly understand themselves and gain more confidence.

Many times, counsellors provide students with information that they need to know. There are many helpful resources at UBC that guide me through to attaining my career goals.

I am willing to work hard and pursue my dream.

Best of luck in your studies!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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