Disagreement with the opinion of a fellow participant /CAE - Letter to a newspaper

Dear Sir/ Madam
I am writing this letter to express my disagreement with the opinion of a fellow participant
about an english course and adventure holiday which recently appeared in your newspaper.

The first thing to mention about ist the accomodation which was on the whole doubtlessly worth the money.
It was pretty obvious that the staff oft he youth hostel where we stayed gave major importance to
hygiene as every room was neat and clean. Occassionaly our instructors made sure that every participant
was feeling comfortable and having a good time. Furthermore they were very easygoing and experts
at teaching students that studying english could be a lot of fun.

One more point to talk about ist he variety of adventure sports that were offered there such as mountain biking,
rock climbing, extreme hiking etc. In addition there were several indoor sports
we could choose from if we did not feel like being outside the entire day.

Inspite oft he fact that there was no food in the hostel most of the participants went tot he
local restaurants as they were not far away. This gave them the opportunity to meet new people
and make friends. In fact i found myself speaking more english and improving thgrough going out more often.

Taking everything into account i would definitely reccomend this holiday trip to anyone who want
improvement in their english and love being active and so I very much hope you will mention
this letter in your next newspaper issue.
Yours faithfully
Nicole

What was the writing task (prompt)?

In any case, this is a superficial paper. Words like "good" and "fun" just don't mean much.

Thanks, how could i change them? :)

.... this latter part is very confusing.... the words "whole" and "doubtlessly" make your sentence too crowded and reduce its effect.
The first thing to mention about it is their accommodation which is real good value for money.


.... you need to improve on presenting your ideas. Tell them more direct and clearly. Then your sentences would sound more appealing to read.