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"Disappearing Acts, Art Eduction in Schools" - Texas State University Admission Essay



kkrissy89 1 / -  
Sep 13, 2010   #1
Instructions: Choose a issue important to you. Write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

Due to the recession, many schools are cutting their budgets in half, causing them to remove certain programs just to save money. Unfortunately, the first programs to get cut are the art education programs. The arts are an essential part of education. From theater to the visual arts, these programs give children an outlet for expression and creativity. Just because times are hard, art education programs should not be removed from any school.

When children do not have creative outlets to relieve their stress, they will find alternatives to release the pent-up emotions. Nowadays, children and teenagers turn to violence and gang afflictions because they have nothing constructive to do with their time. Studies have shown a link between arts programs and academic achievements. Students who are enrolled in an art class are more likely to win academic awards and have the motivation to excel in other subjects. Also, students are more involved in community projects than their peers. "Learning through the arts reinforces critical academic skills in reading, language arts, and provides students with the skills to creatively solve problems." Michelle Obama says. Not only can art education programs keep a child out of trouble, they can also boost ones self-confidence. Not every student cannot play a sport or excel in academic classes, but they can excel in the arts. By removing arts education, schools are not allowing a child to hack into their full potential, leaving them to feel insecure. In a time where the government is stressing the "No Child Left Behind" policy, it seems like some school's are not practicing what they are preaching.

By removing the arts, we are removing a place where creativity and individuality cultivate. Why remove something like that? There are more to the arts than painting a pretty picture or quoting a few lines from Shakespeare. The arts are a part of our every day lives. For example, taking a dance class can heighten ones understanding of the human anatomy and a music class can help in the understanding of math. The arts allow us to use the right side of our brain, the side that lets us use our intuition and feelings a side that academic classes do not use. The arts are essential to providing an excellent education. Without the arts, school would be boring because children and teachers will not have the artistic creativity to fill classrooms up with beautiful pictures and ideas.

The arts are just as important as any other subject. We need classes that make us tap into our artistic side. Try to image our lives without the arts. Image a world without art, music, theater, or dance. Pretty boring isn't it? Now imagine what it would be like for a child. It is crucial that we keep funding art education programs in schools. Having arts education in schools could be eye opening for children in school. The arts provide more than just entertainment; it can turn a student into a well-rounded cultured person.

donrocks 5 / 120  
Sep 13, 2010   #2
Hello Krystle.
1)The problems are many with the essay and apart from many mistakes is this essay is not from your heart. There is no personal touch in this essay which makes it just an essay written by a child trying to impress.

2)Is this topic associated with you. If no, drop it today only. Even if they write that topic can be international etc, they will want to see a personal touch to the essay. It is necessary because we want to know why do you feel for the topic. OK.

3)If the topic is associated with you then you must mention your school... problems faced by them and what measures did they take. Give us complete picture.

4)There are lot of Grammatical errors and I would suggest you get back to the drawing board. This is running haywire trying to touch all current issues. See you have talked about Recession, Gang wars, Art and culture's importance and schools. Be specific and choose one issue.

Cheers....Writing essay is tough. I'm applying this year and having trouble with this topic so...
Hope you find this helpful. :-)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Sep 15, 2010   #3
Just because times are hard, art education programs should not be removed from any school.

This expresses your main idea, but it does not express a strong idea. Make it a strong idea by giving a useful insight. For example, you can say, "At least ten other expenses should be cut before tampering with the art program, because they are not as important, and these expenses will be discussed in the following paragraphs.

Or you can take a more philosophical approach and say, "Artful human expression is what makes life worth living, and none of the other subjects of study are important if we do not have creative expression as our foundation."

But do not just say, "art programs should not be removed."

like some school's school are not practicing what they are preaching.

:-)


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