This is the second short essay for FAMU... I need tough criticism please and thank you! 250 words!
Describe an activity, interest, experience in your life that has been particularly meaningful to you:
It was ten years ago when I first discovered my passion for dance. There are times when I get kicked and bruised and I feel like quitting, but my love for dance pull me back. Dance takes a lot of heart and dedication. There are so many obstacles I go through to obtain a certain skill level in dance. The ability to be flexible is a mind over matter. When I focus and let my mind take over, I become very successful and my flexibility becomes effortless. When I am dancing, I'm not the same person as I am inside the classroom because when I dance, I feel like I can truly express who I am. It was an honor to receive the accolade of captain of my dance team, the role of a leader has changed my life in many aspects. I've met many friends, encouraged a lot of my teammates and improved my skills all because of my commitment to dance. Although dancing is not my prospective major, it's still meaningful to me. It has taught me many lessons in life that I know I will be able to use in the future. Dance has taught me that if you have enough passion for something, it doesn't matter how hard it is or what your limitations are. Dance has shown me the beauty of humility and has helped me develop a capacity for awareness. I know when I'm stressed, I can always blast my radio and dance!
Describe an activity, interest, experience in your life that has been particularly meaningful to you:
It was ten years ago when I first discovered my passion for dance. There are times when I get kicked and bruised and I feel like quitting, but my love for dance pull me back. Dance takes a lot of heart and dedication. There are so many obstacles I go through to obtain a certain skill level in dance. The ability to be flexible is a mind over matter. When I focus and let my mind take over, I become very successful and my flexibility becomes effortless. When I am dancing, I'm not the same person as I am inside the classroom because when I dance, I feel like I can truly express who I am. It was an honor to receive the accolade of captain of my dance team, the role of a leader has changed my life in many aspects. I've met many friends, encouraged a lot of my teammates and improved my skills all because of my commitment to dance. Although dancing is not my prospective major, it's still meaningful to me. It has taught me many lessons in life that I know I will be able to use in the future. Dance has taught me that if you have enough passion for something, it doesn't matter how hard it is or what your limitations are. Dance has shown me the beauty of humility and has helped me develop a capacity for awareness. I know when I'm stressed, I can always blast my radio and dance!
