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Dissonance Debates. College faculty will be judging.



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Oct 27, 2015   #1
On a gray December morning, I awake at 5:30 A.M. and prepare myself for the coming fourteen hours. Every Saturday, I rise before the sun shows itself and drive to Juilliard's Pre-College program in New York City. However, there's something different today-a new air of excitement.

Today, I'll be participating in a debate.

College faculty will be judging. I have spent the past four days extensively researching, and for additional preparation I recite my arguments to myself on the car trip. Upon my arrival, I hurry to the fifth floor to find my opponent already waiting for me.

"Stockhausen is more dissonant!" I shout from across the hall. The debate has begun.

"You're wrong! Penderecki is-look how he blasts the minor second in his third symphony!" my friend yells back.

"Nuh-uh! Stockhausen's work is called 'anti-music' for a reason!"

This is how I often spend the time between 8:24 and 8:30 A.M. on Saturdays, though the music topics range in depth and subject. Other kids in our Socratic advanced music seminar class will engage, and we express ideas and opinions as though we're getting our master's degrees in twentieth-century composition.

Finally, at 8:30, one of the two professors who teach the seminar course walks up to open the door. He coolly turns to us amid the friendly dispute and explains, "Guys. Guys." He pauses. "Stockhausen is more dissonant." (What? I said there'd be college faculty judging.)

I pump my fist in victory and follow him into the classroom.

Needless to say, music-theory, performance, and history-is one of two main infatuations I enjoy exploring. The concept of music was integrated into my life before I could properly use a napkin, but it apparently caught me in an unusual way, as here I am, fifteen years later, not only knowing who Stockhausen and Penderecki are, but actually understanding their compositional tendencies. One of the reasons Juilliard (especially the aforementioned seminar) has been so wonderful is because it has given me opportunities to meet people who care about music far beyond a level of just playing an instrument or liking certain pieces-rather by always wanting to reach a deeper understanding, often through these practices of debate and discussion. As a result, I just keep learning.

As I said, I have two main means of enjoying life, the second of which is chemistry. This is not merely an interest in chemical science or even a quest to succeed in a class, but indeed a fascination I continuously try to deepen through EBSCOHost searches, near daily conversations with my chemistry teacher (just this morning we discussed fluoroantimonic acid, vanadium crystals, and oxidation number mahjong), and memorization of the periodic table. We've debated about which acid is the most powerful, whether or not the Brřnsted definitions are still relevant, and which element is the "best".

Debates like these will always be there, and I'll come ready with research and determination to let them teach me more.

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Oct 27, 2015   #2
On a gray December morning, I awake at 5:30 A.M. and prepare myself for the coming fourteen hours. Every Saturday, I rise before the sun shows itself and drive to Juilliard's Pre-College program in New York City. However, there's something different today-a new air of excitement. --I think this is a bit of odd phrasing. You first discuss as if you're only talking about today, then you switch to what happens every Saturday, then just today again. It would not be so odd if maybe you didn't say "prepare myself for the coming 14 hours. Do you just mean you have a 14 hour day or today's going to be a long and special 14 hours?

I am so very confused as to what the first part of your essay is. Maybe if your prompt were included?

Needless to say, music-theory, performance, and history-is one of two main infatuations I enjoy exploring -- You have listed 3 things and have said "is 1 of 2". Your numbers and nouns and verbs do not agree.

One of the reasons Juilliard (especially the aforementioned seminar) has been so wonderful is because it has given me opportunities to meet people who care about music far beyond a level of just playing an instrument or liking certain pieces-rather by always wanting to reach a deeper understanding, often through these practices of debate and discussion. -- You can't say "one of the reasons is because", you need to say "One of the reasons Julliard has been so wonderful is that it has given me opportunities...etc." Also this is a very long and possibly confusing sentence

I can't say much more without a clear prompt. It all seems a little scattered
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Oct 27, 2015   #3
@katevb, thanks for the feedback. I agree with you on your first point. As for the prompt, this is my Yale supplemental essay, and the prompt is nothing more than write about something that explains who you are outside of your transcript.

Also, for some reason this site changes dashes to hypens. Towards the middle, it should say "music[dash]theory, performance, and history[dash]".

Agreed on the last point. The way I have it makes little sense.

Thanks again!


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