I'm very unsure about my conclusion, so any tips and advices are appreciated. Thank you!
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?
I still feel my conclusion is weak... Any tips?
As I bent over my paper intently, it seemed as if nothing else in the world existed. Suddenly, my Calculus teacher sneaks up on me. "Chuong, what are you doing?" Hiding the paper quickly, I said, "I'm just drawing." Without hesitation, she said that I should focus on math instead of doing something so trivial and useless. In fact, I had been drawing to clear my mind. Unintentionally, she had offended me. To her, drawing was trivial, but to me, it had been my life for ten years.
I remember the first time I saw a comic book. I was stunned by the characters and buildings because they were all hand drawn. I stumbled to the nearest pencil and paper, tossing everything in the way so I could mimic them. However, it was my first time drawing, and with little knowledge and experience, my drawings turned out to be mere pencil marks. With a deep breath and an ambitious sigh, I was determined to recreate these images. Patiently, I started to trace them, familiarizing myself with the strokes and hand movements
After weeks of tracing, I wanted to draw by looking at a reference. I was excited and mostly surprised when my drawing resembled Spiderman. My hard work had paid off. My confidence grew with my improvement, but I was dissatisfied because I had only emulated another artist's work. My unique style was engulfed within the artist's style, and I felt as if I was holding another person's hand while drawing. I wanted to draw directly from my imagination.
This is one of the most difficult challenges I have ever encountered. The images in my mind desperately tried to escape, but it was difficult for me to express them on paper. The head would turn out bigger than the body or the hands smaller than the arms. I kept trying, but success eluded me. I knew I was capable of this. I could not give up so easily.
Although I could not directly draw what I imagined, I found another method just as effective. As I looked over the comics, something caught my eyes. An artist had sketched a skeletal form of his characters before he fleshed them out. I studied his process eagerly. At that point, I was an excited little child again, the same child that first discovered drawing.
The artist first drew a circle. Then a line grew downwards from it, forming the body. Then more lines grew left and right, forming the arms and legs. The lines met at smaller circles, forming the circular joints. The body stretched out, became alive, and then was eaten by the flesh. At that moment, I realized that the circle was his seed of imagination. I was determined to plant mine.
Learning to draw on my own is an accomplishment I am proud of. Through trial and error, not only did I learn how to draw, but I learned the importance of patience, hard work, and determination. I have learned that to achieve something I need to persevere no matter what. I always try to remember the feeling I had seeing art for the first time whenever I face obstacles.
I like the way in which you described your experiences with art. However, you may want to talk about how this relates more to the type of person you are, rather than how Art helps you.
i love to draw too!! ^^
i agree up with shag896 too, u shld focus a bit more on how this relates to the type of person u are. reflect more~ i think for this topic, ur essay shld be more reflective than narrative or descriptive~
It should be fine to be narrative and descriptive. After all, you are an artist. But near the end, try to close the essay with your qualities "patience, determination, and hard work" and move the imagination part up a bit. That way your qualities should stick in the readers mind.
