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I'm a DREMER; Characteristics or perspectives I possess that make me unique



kassiag 2 / 3  
Mar 25, 2013   #1
I posted before but I did a new one and I really need your help to tell me if it's ok or it it's a gramatical error or that stuff. Please, I would really appreciate your help.

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Everybody is unique in their special way, some just haven't figured it out yet. I did. My way is being a dreamer. Not a lot of people are dreamers nowadays, and dreams are the most important thing in a human being. We all dream when sleeping, but few of us are awake dreamers, people that have achievements to beat, who will think of things that may seem impossible and will do the possible to achieve them, who have goals in life, who does not give up. If you don't dream, you won't have what to live for.

Dreamers are the most important people in the world because without them, there would be no one to discover and develop necessary things for humanity, without them we would still live in precarious conditions. It's known that the world need dreamers and doers but, most of all, dreamers who do, and that is rare and difficult. We are often called stupid because people think we can't achieve our "impossible" dreams and in the most times they privet and discourage us from doing necessary stuff to achieve it, because they believe it's a waste of time and it will never come true, but as Walt Disney used to say: "If you can dream it, you can do it.", it's up to us to find a way and when we do it, they don't understand how you achieved it, after all, it was "impossible".

I believe that a head which is full of fears will have no space for dreams. Dreamers fight for things they want without fearing the obstacles, they don't limit themselves to imagine. They face all their challenges until get into the goal. That's why dreamers are, above all, fighters. The realistic know where they are going, but the dreamers went there before and they know what needs to be changed, they try to make it true.

Of course we can't only focus in our big dreams and forget the small ones, they are special too. It's common between kids to dream with all possible things and those ideas might be the ones that will last in their minds while they grow. When I was a kid, I dreamed I would have lots of things. Some of the dreams gone with the time but, for example, I still dream with a tree house and when I have my own home, I will certainly build one because this dream is still in me. If it is important for you, you never stop believing, and someday you will reach it and remember why this was so important. So, when I build my tree house and enter in it, I will remember how to be a kid again and will be full of happiness, that happiness of when you have just achieved a dream. It is a uniqueness feeling that makes us feel unique and special, for being so effortful, determined and for knowing that no one in the world would understand our happiness just because we built a tree house. Dreamers know where they are going, they just don't know how to get there. But they will find out, because they are unique and unique people change the world.

omid_sarox 1 / 6  
Mar 25, 2013   #2
you won't have what to live for.

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"stuff" or "thing" is not a proper word in essay writing. They are too general. Try to be more precise.

You use too much commas. You use commas where you can use dots.

Overall you have a good writing
dumi 1 / 6795  
Mar 25, 2013   #3
Everybody is unique in their special way,

...Everybody is unique in some special way.

Not a lot of people are dreamers nowadays

... well.... I think there are many ....lol

Not a lot of people are dreamers nowadays, and dreams are the most important thing in a human being.

Not many people are dreamers nowadays, yet dreams too are a very important part of our lives. ... in the next sentence tell why you say they are important. Don't drag and tell it at the end of the para.
iluvchocalate13 4 / 7  
Mar 25, 2013   #4
Some of the dreams gone with the time but, for example, I still dream with a tree house and when I have my own home, I will certainly build one because this dream is still in me.

Some dreams fade away over time, but I still dream that when I have my own home, I will build a tree house.

few of us are awake dreamers, people that have achievements to beat, who will think of things that may seem impossible and will do the possible to achieve them, who have goals in life, who does not give up.

How are you an awake dreamer? I think you need to use more examples, examples that are really meaningful to you. And, you should explain their significance and how that makes you an "awake dreamer." I don't think you should use the tree house example...

We are often called stupid

You shouldn't use "stupid." You can use other words, such as "ignorant", "naive", "preposterous", etc.


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