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'Engaged' - Northwestern University Statement (Engineering and Applied Sciences)



dmjackson 3 / 5  
Nov 25, 2011   #1
Hi I am writing my statement for Northwestern University and I just finished typing it and would like some feed back the prompt is: What are the unique qualities of Northwestern - and of the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying - that make you want to attend the University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?

In advanced I would like to thank you for taking the time to read my statement
Here is my statement:

Northwestern University is a university that is diverse and allows students to be engaged with each other. Students learn about each other and meet people from all around the world. These students are able to share a part of them with other students and mix cultures. Not only are the students able to meet people from around the world at the university itself , but they are able to study abroad and travel the world being engaged in their work but at the same time learning about a new country or city. Being a student who has lived in the U.S. all my life and has spoken French for eight years and has had the opportunity to live in Paris I continue to want to explore the rest of the world and having that diversity will give me the opportunity to learn about other countries through other students if I am unable to visit them myself. Northwestern University's Robert R. McCormick School of Engineering and Applied Sciences allows their students to combine creativity with engineering and creating inventions or programs that can change our world. Students design and create and solve problems and not just any problem but problems that are a big issue today. They solve problems that can make a difference in people's lives and not only people but animals as well. Having the freedom to be creative and solving bigger problems in the world really draws my attention to The McCormick School of Engineering and applied sciences being someone who is interested in pursuing computer science and that loves being creative , but at the same time using my creativity to touch peoples lives or to make a difference, is a very important aspect to me and Northwestern University shows me that they can offer me that aspect. Northwestern University also has a wide variety of programs from science to animate arts that combines music and computers to the programs available to students who don't want to pursue a degree in music but would like to play in college and the list goes on. Being someone whose thirst for knowledge can never be quenched, I want to dwell and thrive in that environment, around students who want to learn different things and use it to propel them in life, around students who want to learn everything about everything. That atmosphere is very uplifting, the Northwestern campus is very uplifting. I remember being there performing with the Lincoln Park High School Marching band, we were invited to perform in the Northwestern Homecoming Parade and we received the opportunity to watch the Northwestern University Marching Band perform and the atmosphere was amazing. The band was amazing and the atmosphere of the school's spirit felt like home. That is something I want to be apart of , I know Northwestern University has so many great things to offer me as a student and that I would thrive so much more and I want to be able to make a change in people's lives through my work and Northwestern University has showed me that they can help me accomplish those goals.

shtickball - / 6  
Nov 27, 2011   #2
first of all its a good idea to split it into paragraphs with different ideas.
the first 65% of the essay doesnt expound on any details that are truly UNIQUE to the school. very insert-school-here writing. it only begins when you start talking about the music program and your visit.

if you visited, then this should be easy to write honestly. elaborate more on how the vibe at northwestern really appeals to you.
start with how you want to learn about other countries, then write about your visit and how you felt about the campus (why is it uplifting), then write about the music program and your passion for it, then write about the engineering school (do research on the school for unique qualities you could mention).


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