Engineering is where my passion lies; MECHANICAL ENGINEERING

"The short essay is about passion in engineering. why choose engineering. career aspiration. who and what inspires me to be an engineer."

My name is Gao wen, and I am currently study in Mechanical Engineering at NTU.
Engineering is where my passion lies. I want to be a professional engineer because it allows me to apply my interests to the real world, making a practical difference to those around me by applying the skills I have learnt.

My long-term career aspiration is to be social robot designer. In order to pursuer the dream as a fresh undergraduate, I'll seeking for an job related to automation system design engineering which offer technical/professional enhancement and technological interest.

I always ask myself who and what inspires me to be an engineer. I can't really say about who and what inspires me in engineering. Perhaps that is because the Japanese cartoon movie which makes me dream about own a personal robot since I still a kid. The dream drive me along the engineering path.

"The short essay is about passion in engineering. why choose engineering. career aspiration. who and what inspires me to be an engineer."

My name is Gao wen, and I am currently studying in Mechanical Engineering at NTU.Engineering is where my passion lies. I see myself following the footsteps of many successful professional engineer because it allows me to apply my interests to the real world, making a practical difference to those around me by applying the skills I have learnt. Career-wise, I have always aspired become a social robot designer. It has always been a saying of mine that a neat functional robot can only exist as a result of mastery in engineering. so in order to aid in my pursuit this dream, I will seek a job related to automation system design engineering which can offer experience, and added professionalism which will only bring me closer to my goal. I always ask myself who and what inspires me to be an engineer.Ever since I was a kid, Japanese cartoon robots always fascinated me, but what really drove me along the engineering path was the knowledge that these cartoon robots were built based on something real and tangible, something that i can accomplish.

(Check the Grammar) (Are you applying as freshman?..If so, does the school approve of you working because you insinuated that u planned to work during your freshman year)

My suggestion;
I am Gao Wen, a student at NTU who is majoring in Mechanical Engineering.

i think you should add a little more elaboration on your every point trying to be made then your looking at a well-put essay!:)