Hey Everyone! I have been working on this essay for a few days now and my deadline is within a few days so I thought why not get some last minute feedback? As far as the essay goes it's quite self explanatory. However, after reading many others, it seems that most people have different takes on it. I have seen that you shouldn't brag about your grades, recommendations, etc. because this is the time for you to show the admission officer a little bit of who you are outside of your busy academic life. Alternatively, I've seen that you shouldn't completely convey your full crazy side or that you shouldn't try to be someone your not which I completely agree with. So here is my end product that hopefully is somewhere in between. Additionally, if you find any typos or something that just looks wrong, a notice would be tremendously appreciated. Thanks in advance for the feedback as well!
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.
Dear future Roommate,
If you haven't already noticed, I addressed you as a proper noun due to your level of importance as I expect both of us to play significant roles in our time here at Stanford. My intent for this note is that I am able to convey a little bit of who I am so that with any luck, we are able to eliminate that awkward moment in our first meet. First off, I love to listen and talk about anything, with absolutely no limits on a conversation. The relationship we develop should be unbreakable, and as my experiences as a peer mentor for freshmen in high school as well as a peer mediator, having that constant dialogue between us will get us there.
Life so far has shown me to constantly keep busy in order to be productive, therefore you can expect me to be studying hard in the room, working with an engineering organization, or exercising at the gym. Be that as it may, you can equally expect me to play hard by embracing my surroundings, such as exploring the town for new routes to run, finding local venues for upcoming concerts, and taking advantage of the sensational Stanford community to meet new people. These are only some activities I wish for you to be apart of in hope that you introduce me to various new experiences as well. I undoubtedly know we will have similar interests in common and look forward to numerous discussions about architecture, music, design, sports, style, engineering, and unfortunately, our occasional female difficulties.
Regrettably, you will also cross some of my flaws. This may include, but is not limited to, my many references and impersonations of my favorite films and a tendency to perfect little details of my living space. However, I am willing to look past your imperfections if you can too.
It is with much hope that I was successfully able to display who I am, and I look forward to the day we meet in person along with establishing our everlasting friendship with a solid, firm handshake.
Respectfully,
"My name"
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.
Dear future Roommate,
If you haven't already noticed, I addressed you as a proper noun due to your level of importance as I expect both of us to play significant roles in our time here at Stanford. My intent for this note is that I am able to convey a little bit of who I am so that with any luck, we are able to eliminate that awkward moment in our first meet. First off, I love to listen and talk about anything, with absolutely no limits on a conversation. The relationship we develop should be unbreakable, and as my experiences as a peer mentor for freshmen in high school as well as a peer mediator, having that constant dialogue between us will get us there.
Life so far has shown me to constantly keep busy in order to be productive, therefore you can expect me to be studying hard in the room, working with an engineering organization, or exercising at the gym. Be that as it may, you can equally expect me to play hard by embracing my surroundings, such as exploring the town for new routes to run, finding local venues for upcoming concerts, and taking advantage of the sensational Stanford community to meet new people. These are only some activities I wish for you to be apart of in hope that you introduce me to various new experiences as well. I undoubtedly know we will have similar interests in common and look forward to numerous discussions about architecture, music, design, sports, style, engineering, and unfortunately, our occasional female difficulties.
Regrettably, you will also cross some of my flaws. This may include, but is not limited to, my many references and impersonations of my favorite films and a tendency to perfect little details of my living space. However, I am willing to look past your imperfections if you can too.
It is with much hope that I was successfully able to display who I am, and I look forward to the day we meet in person along with establishing our everlasting friendship with a solid, firm handshake.
Respectfully,
"My name"
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