Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech?
Initially inclined to Georgia Tech due to existing family in Atlanta, upon research I discovered what an amazing institute Georgia tech is. With a sizeable community of diverse international students, I'm pretty sure I won't feel homesick or like an anomaly amongst other students; something I was concerned about before considering studying abroad.
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I think it is a good essay. It reads well and has a good flow of ideas.
I think it would be easier to critique if you would give the prompt.
SORRY! the prompt is : Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech?
While it is good that you consider your personal needs in the response to the prompt, you could have actually done better and discussed some important aspects of the academic department of Georgia Tech that have piqued your interest. By now you have probably chosen your college major right? So talk about the facilities that Georgia Tech offers your college major, or important internships that can help you in the future. Make sure that the admissions officer will know how you plan to take full and total advantage of the learning facilities that Georgia Tech has to offer. That is what the prompt is asking you to explain, in 150 words or less. When you draft the essay again, go over the word count. Answer as truthfully as you can and then we can work on bringing the word count down to the acceptable level it needs to be.
Thank you so much for the feedback! I wanted to write my essay based on my engineering major but couldn't find sufficient information regarding aerospace engineering besides the fact that the aerospace engineering ranking of georgia tech is ranked first on a national level. Although i found information about a research institute dedicated to aerospace in georgia tech, i couldnt decide what exactly to write from the huge amount of information available and if i did i would,ve easily crossed my word limit. As goes for internships, i couldnt find much information either.
Like I said, don't be afraid to go over the word limit at the moment. Respond as best as you can, making reference to the aspects that you found information about within the Georgia Tech program of study. Did you rely solely on the student brochure and website for the information while you were researching? The reason I asked is because when I ran the keyword "aerospace engineering at Georgia Tech", not only did I come up with the department website at the university, but a host of Youtube, facebook, and news articles about the cutting edge offerings of the university also came up. So I suggest that you run the same keywords I used in Google, then look into every link that comes up in order to gather more usable information for your response. Go over the word count. Don't be afraid to do that. By limiting yourself to the word count immediately, you are also limiting your chances to give the best possible reply to the prompt that you can. The response you give can always be edited for word count, provided the essence of your response exists throughout the essay. I can help you with that situation once the response is finalized in content.
Thank you so much! I will do more research as you've suggested and post back my new essay as soon as possible. The only problem is the time constraint, i hardly have 1 to one and a half days left..
@vangiespen ,
this is what i thought id add
The highly praised program of aerospace engineering is probably what inclined me towards Georgia tech the most. Id always thought that I would need a factory to manufacture anything mechanical, but the resources present at Georgia Tech; such as wind tunnels and smoke screen visualizations; are enough to provide me with the resources to experiment and get the most out of my learning process.
Nice language n flow of ideas.For which Exam are you writing this essay for?
content seems to be less but nicely but would be 4/5 considering the word limit... so good 1
this is for Georgia Tech, its an entrance essay @Paritosh
i thought of adding more content but the word count is too small
thanks!
That is a very nice addition to the statement response. Why don't you try to revise the essay by using that paragraph as your opening statement. It really has an effective hook that you should take advantage of by placing it in a more noticeable position within your written response. You can even revise the whole essay to better reflect the supporting reasons that you have for that particular statement of yours. Just change the content of the statement by using the response you wrote as your new template and everything related to your response should finally fall into place. If you end up in excess of the word count, don't worry, I will help you meet the word count requirement as soon as you post the revision here. Just tell me what word count you need to meet.
The highly praised program of aerospace engineering is probably what inclined me towards Georgia tech the most. I had always thought that I would need a factory to manufacture anything mechanical, but the resources present at Georgia Tech; equipment such as wind tunnels and other cutting edge technology; are enough to provide me with the resources to experiment and get the most out of my learning process. Furthermore, with a sizeable community of diverse international students, I'm pretty sure I won't feel homesick or like an anomaly amongst other students; something I was concerned about before considering studying abroad. With an extensive and highly revered set of engineering programs, accompanied by a wide range of interactive clubs and activities to aid students in the learning process; opportunities such as these are hard to find elsewhere. Complemented by master's degrees which can be completed as dual programs with universities abroad, a unique exposure such as this is just the experience I am craving for. As goes for the institute's widely known reputation of rigorous and demanding learning courses, I think it shall be the correct atmosphere for me to get out of my comfort zone and push myself to the height of my potential. Looking forward to being a Rambling Wreck from Georgia Tech!
This is my final version @vangiespen . Thank you for all the advice! Please help me with bringing the word count down, i am planning to submit my application within the next few hours. Eagerly waiting for your reply
