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I'm going to apply for Business Management program in Ryerson uni. So I have to submit an essay. Below is the essay that I have written. Please check this essay for grammatical errors and give me suggestions to improve it.
I was greatly fascinated by the business world since my childhood. It was because I grew up in a business-minded family; they were role models to me. I learned valuable lessons from them, especially from my father, who explained to me how the business ran such as merchandising, interpersonal relationship and business ethics. Moreover, he told me that businessmen play a significant role in the development of our society by providing employment to thousands of people in their huge organizations. Our society would have been an undeveloped one without their massive contribution. Hearing all these, I was greatly motivated to become a businessman in future so that I can earn profit for myself as well as take part in the development of our society.
I knew this was not so easy to achieve without good understanding of the business concepts. So, I decided to indulge myself in all the activities that would help me gain business knowledge. From then onwards, I was interested in watching business news channels and reading business columns in the newspapers and magazines. Moreover, I took courses related to business in my O and A-level exams including Commerce and Accounting. Eventually, I was able to pass my exams with satisfying grades which directed me to learn more about the business in real life; in real situation.
In addition to studies, I have been working part-time in a travel agency to enhance my knowledge about the real business world. The important things that I learned there are interpersonal relationship skills and public relations in detail. Almost everyone there is satisfied with my working condition. Also, sometimes I help my father in his retail shop by performing fairly significant tasks like bookkeeping and collecting data. All these experiences have well prepared me to learn in a good university like Ryerson.
I have chosen Ryerson University to study "Business Management" program for a number of reasons. Firstly, Ryerson has distinctive undergraduate program that combines theory with real-world experience, and in such a program I will be able to transform myself into a business marvel. Moreover, I will be able to get a job very quickly and easily after I graduate, because, statistically speaking, more than 94% of Ryerson's students are employed within six months after graduation. Also, this program, taught by highly qualified faculty members boasting years of experience in teaching 'Business Management', will surely provide me with the highest quality education. Therefore, I can say that I have chosen the best university to pursue my undergraduate program and I am sure I will have a bright future after graduating from this university.
I'm going to apply for Business Management program in Ryerson uni. So I have to submit an essay. Below is the essay that I have written. Please check this essay for grammatical errors and give me suggestions to improve it.
I was greatly fascinated by the business world since my childhood. It was because I grew up in a business-minded family; they were role models to me. I learned valuable lessons from them, especially from my father, who explained to me how the business ran such as merchandising, interpersonal relationship and business ethics. Moreover, he told me that businessmen play a significant role in the development of our society by providing employment to thousands of people in their huge organizations. Our society would have been an undeveloped one without their massive contribution. Hearing all these, I was greatly motivated to become a businessman in future so that I can earn profit for myself as well as take part in the development of our society.
I knew this was not so easy to achieve without good understanding of the business concepts. So, I decided to indulge myself in all the activities that would help me gain business knowledge. From then onwards, I was interested in watching business news channels and reading business columns in the newspapers and magazines. Moreover, I took courses related to business in my O and A-level exams including Commerce and Accounting. Eventually, I was able to pass my exams with satisfying grades which directed me to learn more about the business in real life; in real situation.
In addition to studies, I have been working part-time in a travel agency to enhance my knowledge about the real business world. The important things that I learned there are interpersonal relationship skills and public relations in detail. Almost everyone there is satisfied with my working condition. Also, sometimes I help my father in his retail shop by performing fairly significant tasks like bookkeeping and collecting data. All these experiences have well prepared me to learn in a good university like Ryerson.
I have chosen Ryerson University to study "Business Management" program for a number of reasons. Firstly, Ryerson has distinctive undergraduate program that combines theory with real-world experience, and in such a program I will be able to transform myself into a business marvel. Moreover, I will be able to get a job very quickly and easily after I graduate, because, statistically speaking, more than 94% of Ryerson's students are employed within six months after graduation. Also, this program, taught by highly qualified faculty members boasting years of experience in teaching 'Business Management', will surely provide me with the highest quality education. Therefore, I can say that I have chosen the best university to pursue my undergraduate program and I am sure I will have a bright future after graduating from this university.